Beautiful foliage,
Tree’s so tall.
I began to walk,
To view it all.
Shades of green ,
Sparkle in the light.
Gives a feeling,
Of such delight.
Suddenly a boy,
Came running to me.
The tear in his eye,
Showed me what I can’t see.
I stopped him there,
In his track,
Asked what was wrong,
As he looked back.
“I feel like dying!”
He managed to whisper.
Confided in me,
Like I was his sister.
Before I could reply,
He leapt with joy.
I saw a smile,
On this young boy.
If he could do it,
Why cant I?
I too jumped the cliff,
So I would die.
And as I flew,
In the air.
I new my pain,
Was too much to bear,
But at that point,
Time stood still.
My final wish,
I did fulfill.
Author notes
this was a dream i had not so long ago... it stuck with me so i thought i'd write about it... what do you think??
A contest entry
- Write down your most exciting dream, in the form of a poem.POINTS WILL DOUBLE IF I GET ENOUGH ENTRIES, SO GET YOUR FRIENDS TO ENTER.pw pw pw by echo-ink.
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Dreams sometimes reveal a lot about whats on our mind. sometimes there just dreams. this was very heart-felt and great imagery.
loved it.
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thanks alot for the comment =]
i'm glad you liked it...
take care
xox
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dreams do have meanings and do stick in our heads as if they were real memories of real events.. so im glad you wrote it down for all of us to read, so no about the poem it had that flow to it that calm cheerful flow.. it put a smile on my face haha i loved it.. ah thank you needed the smile
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Awwww
you should prevent the little boy from doing so...hehehe..good and very sad poem..i don't want you to die =(
you're amazing...this write is beautiful..
why kill yourself when you have such a fine talent?
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wow
girl u r a very awesome write u got what it take's to b a good poet ver good work i'd give u 500 lil things if i had them but all i can give ya is 3.
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FANTASTIC!
NEED I SAY ANYMORE?
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this is really well written, i love it!
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thanks so much for reading
i am very glad you liked this one!!
take care fo yourself
love always HB
xoxoxoxoxox
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