His world in despair,
his heart beyond repair,
feeling nobody cared
while wanting no one there,
the day Randy decided to die.
Same story through the passage of time,
without reason or rhyme,
unrequited love being the crime,
welcoming death in his prime,
the day Randy decided to die.
His heart bled till it dried,
no longer able to give love another try,
not caring the reason why,
refusing to tell his heart another lie,
the day Randy decided to die.
His life slipping beyond his grasp,
voice whispering in a strained rasp
love words to the picture that he tightly clasped.
his final breath he drew with a gasp,
the day Randy decided to die.
She ran all around,
treading the earth’s frozen ground,
clues of him not to be found,
for him her love knew no bounds,
the day Randy decided to die.
Searching low and high,
tears falling from her eyes,
as they beseeched the darkened sky,
feeling too tired to cry,
the day Randy decided to die.
She found him on the sandy floor,
without him she could live no more
as her soul left her core,
drifted off towards the misty shore,
the day Randy decided to die.
Babies born in a cruel way,
the elderly wanting their say,
with hearts busy at play,
love extorted its pay,
the day Randy decided to die.
A contest entry
- Triplets! by cricketjeff.
699 points, ended November 26, 2007, 19 entries
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okay, this rhyming and flow is SUPERB (that's probably because I can't rhyme to save my life! lol!)
The story behind this was just the cherry on the ice-cream and it gave me that exquisite feel of remorse - well done! I enjoyed this one immensely!
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Very dark, and I did say I wanted to see all styles, but the meter and rhythm are not as good as some of the others, and some half rhymes, thanks a lot for the entry, I enjoyed it.
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Many thanks for your entry and good luck in the contest....Sue and Jeff
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in this poem there lies a movie in the making-- more pwoerful than Romeo and Juliet
Joe
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don't know about Romeo and Juliet but as usual you are always kind and i do appreciate your words here. i am so happy to see that you decided not to leave the site, wouldn't be the same without you.
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This here was deep my friend. And the rhyme...wow. you done a great job here. best wishes to you in Jeff's contest.
HIYA JEFF!!!!!!
Tory
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lol thank you for your kind words, i can't believe i actually managed to do it, usually when i rhyme it is by accident, i have never set out to do a whole poem in rhyme and didn't think i could do it.
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