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waving pink anemone tendrils
find index finger anchor,

embryo Nautilus possibilities

naked and unshelled
except for love –

God’s and mine


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20 words

A contest entry

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  • Lyndon gold member
    December 2, 2007

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    Dear poet

    with the dear, sweet poem, you have written incisively but you did not notice this in the notes of this contest:
    " Please write between 12 and 24 lines, inclusive."
    I could weep for you in your oversight.


    • Mirthryl
      December 3, 2007
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      Thank you, Ron, for your comment. When I entered, I had not heard back from you, and the notation (top right-hand column) applied by the site says 12 lines...When I got your note (thank you!) I had the opportunity to change, and did not take it.

      You had said that an entry allowed for working at critiqueing, so I chose to make that my focus. I will better understand and be more careful next time.
      Again, thank you.


  • MargaretG
    November 29, 2007

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    Your poem reminds me of what we do to feel safe "naked and unshelled". If we have faith and remember, that is fine! Nature is a trove of imagery, interesting poem.