Rippling, intricate melodies are all that can be heard
Not a single breath to break their spell. Not one single word
Alabaster fingers touch silver strings framed within gold
The Angels stilled their hearts to clearly hear harp music cold
Uncertain beats disturbed Heaven’s peace, pounded in their ears
So Angels have gone without hearts for endless, empty years
My friends and I looked up at them, shining amongst the stars
We laughed as they sliced out beating flesh to avoid love’s scars
But when I saw her lie under surgeon’s knife without need
It was me that lost my heart. How it hurt to watch her bleed
Silver light on golden hair makes her think her life fulfilled
She does not see that painless means that joy is also killed
Candle smoke carried the prayers I cried to her above
But it was all in vain because Angels don’t fall in love
Author notes
4. Angels/spirits
I'm hoping to make this 3 stanzas
stanza 1: Heaven
stanza 2: Hell
stanza 3: Limbo
A contest entry
- Music Inspired # 1 by cirque du soleil.
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Good write here
I enjoyed the balence of emotion and flow, very well done. -
i really liked this. angels fall in love. very good! loved it! i wish you good luck in my twin's contest.
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it depends on the term you take it in. I mean some people are considered angels because it is a nickname given for them and there are the real ones at that
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Yes. Angel's don't fall in love.. very nice poem and thanks for entering this into my contest.
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really good
it shows so much emotion and sorrow but parts were upbeat. I really enjoyed good luck -
The tempo could use some work, the imagery is there and the emotion is as well, I don't understand how music is "cold" (4th line) but I was moved by the passion none the less. Good luck in the contest!
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great write. thanks for sharing this keep up the good work this was indeed a great read
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WOW
Fantastic. This poem really makes you think. Such an amazing imagination you have. Loved it
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