(Verse#1)
Hidden at the shadowed, black stage-side
Ninja butterflies. Bitten fingernails
I watch the headline act get ripped apart
My name is called. It’s my turn to fail
The house backing band warms up and starts
Killer butterflies. Bleeding fingernails
In the spotlight’s glare, I’ve nowhere to hide
(Chorus#1)
In a different light
On a brand new stage
It’s a different world
It’s a brand new page
Of my life
Wrong or right
Rise or fall
Come the end
I’ll see all
In a different light
(Verse#2)
Behind the neon lit, crackling mic
Sound rearrangements. Low voltage stars
I search out your eyes in the bloodlust sea
Merge with the dark. Live through my guitar
I forget chords but they remember me
Sound constellations. Electrified stars
The fires blaze from your and my eyes alike
(Chorus#2)
In a different light
On a brand new stage
It’s a different world
It’s a brand new page
Of my life
Taste the night
Hear the band
Feel the beat
See me stand
In a different light
(Bridge)
In a different light, life holds new delights
I know I’ll never be the same again
To my joy and fright
Crossroads of my life, I’ve chosen tonight
The new path I'll take to a different end
In a different light
(Verse#3)
Spread out across the diamond studded sky
Rising voice. Accelerating heart
Say what you want of the path that I chose
Now I can't fall. It's now my life starts
I hear your doubt dim as you cheering grows
Resonating voice. Elating heart
See how my star shines, like a victory cry
(Chorus#3)
In a different light
On a brand new stage
It’s a different world
It’s a brand new page
Of my life
Flying high
Singing free
From now on
You’ll see me
In a different light
(Extro)
As my chance unfurls
For a brand new life
I can see the world
In a different light
Author notes
Partly inspired by the title and a photo I saw, but mostly inspired by what I felt standing on a stage for the first time, under the lights, staring into the dark. It was wonderful. I was alive.
My first EVER lyrics, so probably far from perfect. I've only learnt from listening to my favourite songwriters/artists: Rogers&Hart, Cole Porter, Queen, Dusty Springfield and The All-American Rejects. Some of these songs go for 5&1/2 mins plus I'm not a good editor...so, yes, this is long.
Howevere, this is a Rock song and should be FAST. From the start up to the end of 'Merge with the dark.', play/sing it fast and nervous. Everything after that is fast and excited.
Verses are not-quite-sung-not-quite-spoken, fast and hushed. The following verse words are slower and with more emphasis:
(Verse#1)
(Line#1) "Hidden"
(Line#4) "my turn to fail"
(Line#7) "nowhere to hide"
(Verse#2)
(Line#1) "Behind"
(Line#4) "through my guitar"
(Line#7) "my eyes alike"
(Verse#3)
(Line#1) "Spread out"
(Line#4) "now my life starts"
(Line#7) "a victory cry"
The choruses are still fast but louder and more jubilant. This is the part showing the determination to face and overcome fear. No 'not-quite-sung-not-quite-spoken' here. Very musical and very Rock. Only slower with emphasis on the following chorus words:
(Chorus#1/2/3)
(Line#5) "my life"
(Line#10) "different light"
Being my first song, I know almost nothing about Bridges and Extros, so feel free to ignore the following suggestions.
Only slower with emphasis on the following bridge words:
(Bridge)
(Line#2) "I’ll never be"
(Line#3) "To my joy and fright"
(Line#5) "path I'll take to"
(Line#6) "In a different light"
Only slower with emphasis on the following extro words:
(Extro)
(Line#2) "brand new life"
(Line#4) "different light"
A contest entry
- Music Inspired # 1 by cirque du soleil.
475 points, ended December 5, 2007, 13 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Write Me A Song... by cirque du soleil.
300 points, ended January 14, 2008, 16 entries
Honorable mention
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Please tell me what you think?
Comments
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Fantastic!
This really does capture that 'here goes' feeling as you step up to the mic. It's a unique moment in time with particular sensations. I've been a Rock singer for a long time and can 'FEEL' the moment from your words. I also sometimes play guitar/keys and knew exactly what you meant in the line:
'I forget chords, but they remember me'
This is so true! When I've thought I'd be too spaced out to move during the first song, my hands have still played for me.
I know it's hard for a vocalist to 'merge with the dark, live through my guitar' but we do find ways of letting ourselves get lost in a different persona. I was really taken with this and as a songwriter, can tell you that it's strong stuff, original and punchy!
As for the form, that depends on what audience you aim it at. Don't fall for the comercial 3 min wins all sketch, because music is too diversified for that to be true anymore. As long as you can add new elements to the texture/timbre for the different melodic phrases you should still make it sound great, long or not. Well done.
Lianonsidhe
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thank u for the notes!!!
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Wow, I'm not sure what kind of music you put behind this, but I used a kinda upbeat one and it sounds awsome. The actual verses might be a bit too long to sing, but other than that, amazing first write. I really liked it. Can't wait to hear it on the radio!
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Okay, thanks for labelling everything so well, it makes it easier to read. like i said, i love this...but i think its a bit long....uness its really fast. author's notes would be appreciated!! tell me a bit more about the style of this song, and maybe cut down a bit..will check back befor judging!
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love this!thanks!
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Great song here, nice and hopeful. Good luck.
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