I wonder what it would be like
To ride through space upon my bike
I’d pedal near, I’d pedal far
I’d pedal past each ancient star
To each planet I would go
As I traveled to and fro
My wheels would tread across the sky
As I journeyed way up high
And when I found it time to leave
The Universe itself would grieve
I’d bid farewell to sun and moon
And plan to come back very soon
Author notes
Something weird and silly. I hope you like it!
A contest entry
- Happy Poems of all sorts by kids to age 13 by Periwinkle Blue.
550 points, ended January 4, 2008, 19 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I would have to say that this whimsical piece blew my socks off. (That might explain why I don't have any on...)
However much I want to deny that I like traditional rhyme scheme, your piece is definitely the best rhyming poem I've read on AP so far!
Great, wonderful, terrific piece!
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wow a great poem on a unique subject
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wow marvolous write well deserved trophy
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I do like this because it is a darling poem! Cute and fun to read.
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This made me smile. Very good! I would like that too
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Ah this is a great poem! It reminds me of the whimsical witty poems of Shel Silverstein, who used to be one of my favorites as a kid. The rhyme flows wonderfully, and the idea itself is interesting and very funny.
Awesome job
~Write on!
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Wow!
Omg omg omg! This was SO awesome! It was great to have a wonderful read in the morning.
"To each planet I would go
As I traveled to and fro"
I wouldn't have been able to find something as great of a word as fro that rhymes with go
This was a very great poem, and a silly subject too
Nice job! 
~Pandy
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I honestly wanted to sing this out loud when I read it. Add some techno in the background and I could make millions
. Anyway...
I like how you view the world. Yes, this about space... but the space (I believe) you are talking about, is the space of someone's ability to grow as a person, maybe. Maybe the space to become something greater than just a little girl riding her bicycle? Each planet may stand for a stopping point, resting point, whatever... an ancient star may be elders... people who have seen life longer than the others. And sometimes on that path to becoming great, we, as humans, sometimes get sidetracked. Mostly, not sometimes, to be honest. So of course, back to the soil to what physically matters, money and all that jazz. But you'll make your way back in space where you started. Onwards towards victory! And this poem is YOUR first step
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Toodles,
B. Lucas
(I apologize for my sloppiness in all of my comments... I usually just let stuff flow through me in these. Please forgive me?)
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It seems that you know more about my poetry than I do! I never really thought about it that deeply - it just came out. Perhaps this is why poetry is considered an outlet for one's soul...
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I think about things too deeply. It's one of my many flaws.
Sometimes I wish I was ignorant...
but that itself, well, is ignorant.
"Just because the toilet flushes and the door is closed, it does not mean they used the bathroom!"
Who thinks of that when you hear the toilet flushes?
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i really liked this!! you have really great word choice and therefore equally awsome rythm.
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Beautifully written. It was a little short, but short and sweet. I've always wanted to go into space.
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For being a young poet, you sure have a good sense of beat and rhythm in your poem. It meshes very well with the rhyme pattern. Normally, I am against the simple AABB pattern, but for a poem lioek this, it works. Good write.
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