Soon, escaping away from them all,
the visions of perfection surely fade
appearance-wise like everyday, the burden
The first time ever I saw your face
I turned around, as eyes were tearful
Then, as I may have turned again,
Ignoring what were still on me,
The truth was, that they were,
and I was never to know,
The love returned in my unknowing,
just the thoughts aspiring to your eyes
that I now see in my dreams,
never to turn again and wonder why,
How, if I had, what things would now
be solved as reminisce,
But to die knowing how much I miss you.
Your face is the image of heaven
that to all intensive purpose
is unequal to the hell I chose
My Miss Unite untied.
A contest entry
- You Favourite Song by Beating.
300 points, ended November 27, 2007, 18 entries
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this is really sad and beautiful. It's very unique, and I had to read it through twice, just to make sure I really got it. It's very special.
One thing though, what song is this inspired by? -
This is sad and beautiful.
Like discovering that the power to love has been hidden deep inside, and finding it back again but in a too late (or maybe not) time
The graphic helped to add some innocence to the thoughts.
Loved it!
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I'm really crap at comments, but I feel like returning yours. So here goes.
The words flow into place well making it a nice to read. You keep the reader fully engaged all the way through. Well done. *Lots of
s* Hannah
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Wonderful
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Beautiful. It speaks in of itself. The words just seem to flow into a seamless piece.
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very nice
i love this piece , dreamy imagery , and sweet words , everything needed for a beautiful write .
~ ♥ Rena ♥ ~
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