I promise to keep it short
as short as a 100 lined report
My Santa Clause
I have to warn you there will be no time to pause
I'd like them in quick haste
I promise that even if their late
I wont hate
You see I want a doll
but not just any old one
with a ribbon in her hair
the one I always have to share
but the doll in the patterned dress
made with silk and lace
the one you put up on the shelf
and keep all to your self
And then I want a pony
not a black or brown one
but a pony in pure white
the ones you can see from miles away
their so bright
Santa please
do you think you can manage?
I kept it to two things
and as I promised
it not very long at all
Author notes
Ok so here my wish list...lol I wrote it as I child would have wrote it, I hope the rhyming isn't so bad.
11/13/07 3:34 pm
A contest entry
- CHRISTMAS LIST CONTEST by Jeremy0826.
900 points, ended November 26, 2007, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Tell me what you think
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my thoughts are either go with the rhyme scheme like you started with or not use it at all. for me it is distracting having two lines rhyme then two or three that dont.
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Well unless I sit down and think about it, I really suck at rhyming, and free stile is more freeing....so I'll stick with thinking my poems out more.
Thank u 4 ur honest comment, its great 2 hear people real thoughts sometimes
~Lorissa~
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This is really cute my friend and I hope
that you do get these things and everything
else that your heart desires this year and
in the years to come. It's funny how we all
grow up wanting a horse or pony. I remember
begging my parents for a horse when I was small,
but the house that we lived in wasn't big enough
for it. Of course I could never understand why,
after all it was just a horse! LOL! Anyway,
great job with this and I wish you the best of
luck with it in my contest! I appreciate it!
Jeremy0826
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