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The Problematic Thing

You were ignorant
And you were lame
I had a broken heart
And you couldn't even say sorry
Why couldn't you say sorry?

Days passed
And weeks turned into months
A couple years later
You broke through some other chicks hearts
And left theirs black and blue

Now you're all alone
And I'm sure as hell
Not sorry for you

And I can't believe
What went on
Behind my back
Some trashy girl turned you on
You couldn't help it
You just had to jump in
And regardless of what I said
You surely did

And I can't believe
What went on
You kicked me to the ground
And never saw
The tears building up inside
You must have selective hearing
'Cause when my tears poured out
You never even heard me cry

And yeah, yeah
You still have me wrapped
Around your lying finger
But that's only because
Every time I try to run
This collar keeps getting tighter

And yeah, yeah
You still have me
But only by a string
I could easily say goodbye
But I can't
And that's the Problematic Thing

I'm holding onto our rope of memories
That I don't want to grow old
I'm holding onto our rope of memories
But I'm not sure how to let go

You were ignorant
And you were lame
I had a broken heart
And you didn't even say sorry
What the hell was so hard about sorry?

Author notes

Originally this was supposed to be a lyrical piece.
At the time I wrote it I was too consumed in my own thoughts, so I didn't find the time to figure out what I wanted the Verses, Bridges, and the Chorus to be.
Enjoy,
::.. Poetrydove ..::

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  • trista gold member
    November 14, 2007

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    Hi Hon,

    I read this, then looked at the contest, then came back and read this again. It seems to me this fits the contest very well. It's raw and without that "shine" an edited piece of your poetry would normally have.

    You have a couple of lines in here I really liked:
    "You still have me wrapped
    Around your lying finger"
    I thought that was good and original.

    I can easily imagine this as lyrics, too. Maybe down the road you'll consider changing it over?

    Really nice job, and I wish you good luck in the contest. I may try to write for it, too.

    Love and s fro your AP mom,
    ~J.

  • xTomorrowx
    November 14, 2007

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    I like it... It sounds like it could be put to music, it sounds really musical...
    It's a really good piece, I like it a lot...
    Thanks heaps for entering and good luck! =)