Pray you forgive me for I must speak my mind,
It has plagued me for sometime but I am implore you
To stay and listen – and listen well, for my story
Is quite an amusing one at that,
And I assure you that you may want consider committing the same act…
I am quite bemused and impressed by my ingenious
Yet deceitful and quite insidious arrangement where by I put to shame the Serpent’s
Lure of a succulent venomous apple to an innocent yet impressionable Eve,
Though I should confess I have killed several hundred of them -
But do not think me as an evil succubus because of this – oh no! Do not!
I am not quite that sinister to take pleasure in these acts!
Do you think me a Demon or Devil?
But I digress!
This darkened deed clouded in mystery starts where by I walk upon
Angelic feathers to the very bowls of Hell! You must deem me brave?
Alas! I lightly tread upon the muck of the filth with an olive branch in hand,
Offering my services to those unfortunate underlings with the little burning yews
Vexed by the humanitarian hand of their pestilent horde
Of incapable Mothers and Fathers who could never understand
The true implication, and simple comprehension of true juvenile splendour!
It angers me so to see these girls dressed in tatters!
- Or so I tell them! How naïve…
Woe!
Oh! Woe I tell you! It woes me so to see their daughters live their life without touching or understanding the true fruits of sophistication and education,
And that, of the simple soap, perfume and jewellery that true Princesses of the land
Doth wear!
“Oh thank yee M’lady!”
“You’re too kind, M’lady!”
“Seven bags full M’lady!”
Moving on… After I expertly orchestrate the event and the passing of items to my…
Caring hands, I mould them. I deceive them for a week or two -
Or maybe a month, I never do care to count the days-
And then, I guide them down into my chamber where again I tempt them,
I beckon them:
“Do come in! Don’t mind the knives there upon the silver wear! An early lunch – I thought I’d personally invite my greatest student to my lovely school!”
“Do come in! Sit upon the bath there! Yes! Just wait there! Perfect!”
Beautiful virgins… Or rather some of them.
Such beautiful youth however? Ripe with extra virginic blood…
Do not think of me as someone as bloodlust as Count Vlad – the scoundrel,
Please, do not think of me as selfish to take the lives of these… People?
No. They’re just peasants! Why would you care about them?
Forgive me for asking…
To continue with my story which is fast coming to an end,
I shall tell you how I purged their beauty to sustain my own…
Firstly I close their eyes; shush them with a finger, sing them a lullaby,
Place a palm upon the supple lips and a dining knife across throat and thus,
Make a simple slit from ear to ear and then, sing to them as they bleed
My bath that little bit more full.
That makes five-hundred and ninety nine now.
Only one more until the bath is full.
Thus that is the price of beauty and the story my dear,
Now, won’t you be so kind as to be my six-hundredth customer?
Author notes
Made up in a short amount of time. I'll iron out mistakes when I see it.
In a list
A contest entry
- Give Me Subtle Blood (adult) by MessedupMarionette.
950 points, ended November 26, 2007, 5 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Tell me what you think, or don't, that works. Or tell me how shit it is. Be blunt. Like a hammer to the back of the skull.
Comments
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This verdict thing is far too absurd, don't you think?
You still amaze me.
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Wow
Another amazing one, and in response to "Thud", I loved the bizzare sexuality in it, bringing it up to a brief yet effective climax. If you ask me (not likely but I'll continue hehe!) it's very Elfen Lied-esque! I can imagine 'Lilium' being the lullaby.
Makes it al the better!
"Beatus vir qui suffert tentationem..."
XxX
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(thud)
I really enjoyed this--it's a wonderful bit of poetry. It's brilliant, great, magnifique! My one critique is this----the poem seemed to have this bizarre sexuality to it (or maybe that's just my being crazy) and this strange attention to detail that was very captivating, and I would've liked to have seen the death of the nameless virgin played upon a little bit more. It seemed like a big lead-up and not much about the murder itself. Or perhaps I'm macabre.... but anyway, I love it. Thanks so much for entering and good luck!
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*blinks at the thud*
Thanks babes. The poem was pretty much made on the spot because of your contest actually spurred me to write a bit of poetry after months of mental blocks. Twas nice that you inspired me.
Sorry for not continuing with the bloodshed, for I know how twisted you are, and I thought i'd leaving your dark imagination to fill in the end. ^_^
*hughug*
~Neko Mimi Mode Desu
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