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These voices that never stop
Yelling softly through the silence
Piercing deep within
Reminding me that this is not home

Home,this place I have pursued for so long
Voices screaming quietly,harshly
Hurting my soul
Just to let me know that this is not home

Home, where peace will be waiting
And the voices will stop
Love will open its arms
And whisper softly
Welcome.

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I am the half sister daddy didin't tell you about. I need a family.

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  • Melissa Burns
    November 2

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    I love this poem, home can mean so many different things to so many different people! I just enjoyed the feel of this poem (Esp the last five lines!), and getting back into the swing of things here at AP!


  • HeavensDaughter
    January 31, 2008

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    I love your use of opposites like:

    "Yelling softly through the silence"

    and

    "Voices screaming quietly"

    I know how loud silence can be.

    I see a longing for a home. I hope you found it. I hope you found that "welcome" and the place where peace is waiting.

    Good write.


  • Norman Crabtree
    January 16, 2008
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    well, i sort of got you needed a home from the poem, and erm... well, good luck with that...


  • quack silver member
    December 17, 2007
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    im rhianna and you can be my family if you want
    hugggggggggggs you tight


  • korculablue
    November 29, 2007

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    A sad poem

    Hello juno0404,
    Your poem about "Home" shows deep longing. Is this a real need for a home in the sense of a family home? Or are you longing for someone to love who will ground you with their love and "lead you home" not sure, but whichever it is it's so well written. There's a lot of pain here and contrasts throughout......"yelling softly" for example, and in the silence, "piercing deep within" Then there are the lines... "Voices screaming quietly,
    Harshly hurting my soul"

    The last verse lifts your sadness into hope as you think about what it will be like to reach that home and dwell within it and there will be no pain. Love will whisper softly Welcome.

    I really like this poem from the longing heart.

    Take care korculablue

  • Theory Of The Lost
    November 19, 2007

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    Well done,this was short but sweet and yet very emotional powerful, you showed loneness, hope, sorrow, a want to be loved. This was well worded and with a touch of visual imagery to me Very well done good job and good luck!!!

  • Melissa Burns
    November 15, 2007
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    Sad poem, but great read. Thanks for sharing this with everyone.

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