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Keeper of Hell's Gate

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 Dedication poem to Poetic Advisor:

"Corrupt"   thankyou for the lessons you teach.

Dark writer, I hope you enjoy this!

 

Keeper of Hells Gate

Probes, disposes, dispenses

He looms AFIRE, Singes, Blazes.

Decides your fate, whether to

Burst open hell's gate,

lurking

ravenous dark demons await.

You wish to live bound,

Entwined n' twisted,

Alone and Stark?

I m m o r t a l ? 

I am the Keeper of Hell’s Gate.

 A test you must pass,

To fearlessy write.

Confront your rotting putrid flesh eating denials?

Convince me this,  pass my test.

Fail……FACE my Wrath!

Extending his sword, a jagged spine of another,

A skull his handle carved n worn.

 

I struggle to find breath,

“I have come to Exchange my life for another.”

Stench of smoke glooms the room,

A piercing scream, sounds of ripping flesh,

Surround to devour me now.

He approaches.. one step closer, piercing deep, scouring my soul.

Blinding my vision,  peering directly inside my eyes.

Inhales my spirit scent,

clenched teeth tasting my bleeding beliefs.

His eyes fill with flickering flames,

steaming heat ...Blistering my face.

I desperately hold in my cry.

Standing still, in traumatized shock,

Awaiting his decision now.

 

"Filth n abandon is their pride."

For all who dwell Inside.

A living voice flooding your brains, consuming & twisting your veins.

Lost in fantasies, serial killers of unconscious cubicles.

Their only delight, feasting upon each pain n burn delivered.

I stand firm, uncontrollabley… I am shivering.

 The echoed explosion, a roar, fills the room..

I fall upon the floor, Hideous laughter, Melting heat eminates, surrounds.

I hear, “Hell’s Gates Wont’ Open for you This Day!”

This hell you wear?

YOU must stare in the face,

it's only illusion...your despair. 

 Fearless you are not!

 

Closing my eyes tight,

I wait to... die .......….

                 grieving the choices I  made.

“Death has no interest or fondness for you.”

BE GONE…LEAVE THIS PLACE NOW!

 

A hand, strong n smooth, muscular feel too…

Allows me to stand,

TRANSFORMED...he stands boldly before me.

This Keeper of Hell’s gate flaming fire... slowly..... fades

replaced by  Arc bending light, ominious glowing transparent  hues of bold light.

 

Dizzy, I walk away, I see words upon my Poetic Screen say,

"Write anew"

Duel the challenges you face each day.

Do not seek to feed SHAME.

Give up your controlling ways.

Stop reacting-  re-acting this pain.

Activate, Cultivate not exchange your life for another.

Learn this?

And You Both will Live.

Keeper of  Hell's Gate returns to his designated place.

Approach if you dare,

he will be waiting there to decide your fate. 


 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

OPTION #5: facing the fires of hell in this lifetime.
Boldy a dark poet spoke.

guarded by the most power of beings...
Archangel Michael commander of heavens army!
Ancient scriptures state he is the protector of both
gates, heaven n hell.

Corrupt poet has been instrumental in helping me to
break thru grief of a family member who is struggling
to recover from addiction. Wise words he did give.

Art illustration/photo deviantart.com incredible artistry
for us all to enjoy.
I encourage to read his poetry.
"Corrupt" DEDICATION and thankyou!
Strong bold writer!

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  • neurosine gold member
    February 8, 2008

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    Preachy and not very much like Dante at all except I think in intention. The bright and ever changing font colors don't help your case.
    I hope you daughter recovers well. Being a fan of various addictions, I know how they can ruin people. Family and friends who stick with us through it all is the thing most likely to save us. A reason to be sane, do better, and shuffle off corruption.


  • j-ay rose
    January 21, 2008
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    Very nicely written; thank you for entering my contest.


  • Commodore Rouge
    January 12, 2008

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    This is amazing. It seems like if someone writes a poem about hell or satin or life after death, it's the same thing everytime. But no, this was original and fresh. I enjoyed reading this since it was full of personality and zest. I like the phrase "keeper of hell's gate". That adds a lot, versus "hell's door" or something dumb. Great job, but I'm wondering how you only won an honorable mention with this poem . . . it's spectacular! Maybe you'll win something in the future!


  • SilverButterfly gold member
    December 22, 2007
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    Wow! Kathleen you far surpass me in your ability to tell a story. This is wonderful!It had to a very hard time for you and your poet friend was an angel in disquise for being there to help ease the pain.
    You should have a Gold Trophy beside it!!

    SilverButterfly


  • iheartjohnlennon
    December 15, 2007

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    Woah. Great imagery. I really like the adjectives you used, and the metaphors, too. I also liked how good this was for a non-rhyming poem (I'm a sucker for rhymes).
    I particularly liked how you made the lines different colors to signify what should stand out (I'm a sucker for things that look good. Slight OCD runs in the family). My favorite part was the first stanza.
    Good job on this! You should have won the contest.
    ,
    White


  • malkinpuss
    December 3, 2007

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    Creative

    A wonderfully creative write. Well set up and definitely worth not only many readings but listenings as well!


  • k8fairy
    December 1, 2007

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    Wow that was very strong,
    I wish I had money to afford affects but sadly I am but a poor student, I can't afford apples some weeks and I have managed to convince people asking for my money to give some of theirs to me, but thank you for the suggestion of adding effects to my own, if I could, I would try it out.

    But yes, this poems seems to hit me in the face, very cool.


  • onesugar gold member
    December 1, 2007
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    Amazing! That's all I can say
    I would love to be able to write like that.

    ~sugar~


  • lesbian-in-love
    November 30, 2007

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    A very strong piece. I like this one a lot. Mostly the lines:
    Stench of smoke glooms the room,
    A piercing scream, sounds of ripping flesh,
    Surround to devour me now.
    He approaches.. one step closer, piercing deep, scouring my soul.
    Thanks so much for entering into my contest and good luck to you.


  • Blue Rew silver member
    November 28, 2007

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    This is so strong and powerful both in it's imagery and it's overall atmosphere of choices and facing consequences for those roads we take. It's open to interpretation in some aspects too as it can be read as an inner battle; being reborn onto a new path which offers a break from those habits of the past.
    I feel the different fonts add nothing to it...
    for me they were more of a distraction taking some of my focus away from the actual words and presence of the piece. I've come back to this time and again to read but reserved comment until I had time to focus fully on what actually was unfolding within this verse. That's how strongly the font affected me...
    Overall, It's an exceptional display of talent that exudes dark imagery and powerful inner thought. Blue


  • raggyann
    November 24, 2007

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    to know and recover from addiction
    is a blessing in its self but this was amazing
    your words made this poem come to life
    i was captavated
    wih every line
    your a great poet


  • JoyfulWriter
    November 24, 2007

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    This is so amazing! You really are a superb writer....with something like this...with imagery out of this world....the reader is awed...thanks so much for sharing...smiles, Terry


  • Breathing-Fate
    November 18, 2007

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    Its very unique i only wonder wat inspired it sis it is very powerful i ike it alot --best blessings + giggles---your sis fate


  • Falecurst
    November 16, 2007

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    *nods* Damnedably captivating story, that, a tad hard to follow at certain times, but the "wait, what was that, exactly?"s just helped to draw the mind deeper in, as dangling a much coveted toy just out of a puppies reach... when the puppy is given the withheld toy, it tears into its cottony flesh with all the more ferver and zeal. damnedably good poem.

    -Falecurst


  • Denierim
    November 16, 2007

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    Wuah! Such amazing imagery you used here, and I simply love the way you built this! Not only the poem itself but the background and the different colored texts too, they really added up to the depth of this poem. Usually I get a headache if there's too much going on on the screen, but I really really liked this dark story that had a strong meaning to it, and a great depth too!

    Thanks for sharing this with us! A wonderful example of greatly written dark poetry!


  • Cannonsfire
    November 14, 2007

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    This has a very original style to it, with good metaphor and imagery and keeps you entertained until the last line. Very well done. Love, C


  • moluv10
    November 14, 2007

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    WOW! You continue to amaze me with your creativity! Great imagery in this piece. Well written. Good luck in the contest.


  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    November 13, 2007

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    Stunning work

    The imagery in this was outstanding and it was very very beautifully-written indeed. It was powerful and flowed like smooth chocolate. Your words intertwined to produce a monumental effort it dark writing, and it shows. Wonderful writing. Keep it up.

    Well done indeed.
    Wayne
    xx


  • Menace
    November 13, 2007

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    Okay I want some of that cough syrup you're still drinking. The imagery is astounding, but I'm not sure of the theme. nice way of encooperating a few tips I have given you into this at the end. Yea, I caught that. I'll give it a 90%....because only I can truly right/write myself. hehe
    Oh and shut up spydur. You don't know what I like!


  • Grimoire
    November 13, 2007

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    I humbly genuflect and float back into the steaming cesspool of my own desires. You have captured the quintessential moment, despite the paradoxical meaning. Keep your pen bathed in darkness, for it loves the shadows, obviously. Nicely written, if a a little bit of a lengthy lecture, so be it. The sporadic shades of Hell within deem it worthy of a blasphemous pageant.
    immolation,
    homewrecker

  • Maingie Luupi-n-ine
    November 13, 2007

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    Jah, jah, read, read, brood, brood, see'd, see'd...

    Image: I see a large happy snake come to be greeting little up-down diving one, who looks like it shall lunch become. And some white light that may be behead, or an demon shaking its rattle to row hell....
    ****************
    Poem: "AFIRE" - meaning 'not on fire, not fire'? or 'enflamed'? The latter I venture to assume.

    I am going to live alone?? What about The Keeper?? Can't I drop by for a chat???

    {{ Basically, this stuck me as cliched Christian Inverse pseudo-Mysticism. I am not unfamiliar with STURFF, but I am not a fugged up Xian/ex-Xian. That said, I go on.}}

    OK: subject matter is 'confront one's self in all truth with the truth'?? If so, OK. On I go.

    I do find it hard to identify, and the augmentation by flighting peregrination rather than shock value would colour the hue of my thoughts such that no matter my boughts-with-me, I may be dragged through to the doom that you zoom and slash before mine eyes.

    Riidle me this: If I choose to approach, am I not the one deciding my fate?

    Anyway, continue on thy way.
    Only thing of worth was what
    I did say regarding poetic entrancement,
    at least so far as your 'special relationship'
    be concerned.

    Vale, Intrepitude!

    Mangy Loop Eyeing,
    aka
    The Vampyre Thubbaalon.


  • asilentdisaster
    November 13, 2007
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    wow this is really good.
    =DDD


  • a.changed-soul.
    November 13, 2007
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    hehe Write* Not Right


  • a.changed-soul.
    November 13, 2007

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    This Was An Awesome Poem! Very Creative, loved the imagery, it was interesting, and beautifully well written! I dont really like to read that much, I only read what im interested in, I'm sure "Corrupt" will love this poem. When I say I only read what im interested in, I mean You Ever open up a book read the first line, and if you don't like it you either put it back or fall asleep... right? well I read this until the end... Awesome Right!!!


  • bones7
    November 13, 2007

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    i liked this ALOt!
    very good
    and its long too.
    your pal bones


  • Mirrors shard
    November 13, 2007
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    good imagery


  • SpydurPoet gold member
    November 13, 2007

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    Wow. WOW. He is going to love this. Maybe I should not put that just in case he wants to disagree with me...
    ROFL
    Beautifully penned for a wonderful writer!
    Write on.
    ~*~SP~*~

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