It take one word to dull my senses
rocketing into this downward spiral.
Sunlight's radiance changes hue
as clouds of gloom descend.
One word spat from venomous lips
is all it takes, spirit curls within.
Looks of censure shatter the core
as tears of rejection rain unleashed.
The light has faded, darkness prevails,
till new dawn liberates, renewing faith.
Author notes
Prompt - Mood Swings
No more than 10 lines.
In a list
A contest entry
- Mood Swing - PIF - No Quickie by poetryality.
525 points, ended November 19, 2007, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Proceed in tnderness
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ah yes, a single hateful word can cause a lifetime of pain and swing a mood in an instant to black, a good poem.
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I really like this poem. It is the sadness I think, but it puts it into prespective. I often find myself writing about sadness. Good work!
P.S. Thank you for commenting my poem it's been a while since I've been on here but I'll try to update more often. -
It's good thing most people don't know how little it takes, even on a website.
Nice write.
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I feel like you are writing about me in this piece... exactly how I feel right now... why I have been off hiding from the world... beautiful hun gold or peanuts
Karen
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I can feel the mood from; "one word" as it descends from the very first free verse couplet. I can see line three, vividly. Excellent!
I have felt this lashing and the inner-senses that cringe.
"One word spat from venomous lips
is all it takes, spirit curls within.
The 4th plummets but the 5th has switched gears and brings us rising like a Phoenix. Splendid work Poet. Thank you for this entry and I wish you the best.
Much Love & respect ♥
Renee
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wow this is so powerful and holds so much within it
it is strongly trom th prompt giving it truth
well done and best of luck
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this is AMAZING. i've been reading isobelle carmody's "legendsong" series...so the unravelling title enticed me to read this =P
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