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You would fall in love if you just saw

Hard to discover what is fake
so you give, and they only take
Trying so hard, trying to be
look beyond and maybe you will see

I'm more than just a pretty face
let me show you my pace
Don't be stupid and so vain
It will bring you nothing but pain

you would fall in love if you just saw

I am a person, open your eyes
I've been told all the stupid lies
I can see it, but I still have hope
I fight for love and I try to cope

I just wanna find someone who is true
Who loves me even when I'm ugly and blue
I want someone who loves me without conditions
who aims for the same goals and missions

experiences have made me complicated
I've hoped, prayed and waited
I want someone who loves me for being me
but people are blind cause they don't wanna see
It's easier to see a piece of meat
then you don't get hurt, you defeat

look beyond and you will see, I'm here
I'm hurt and far under but I'm still there

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you would fall in love if you just saw

A contest entry

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  • xCandieKissesx
    August 29, 2008

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    Great flow and emotion leaking out of every word you wrote. It really brought the poem itself to reality. Thanks for entering and good luck!


  • Esgon Rashak
    July 3, 2008
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    the flow and emotion is great just what I asked for thank you


  • crystallynnbradford
    June 18, 2008
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    the flow and emotion is really well written


  • michael thomas gold member
    November 23, 2007

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    I like your repeating line and the body of the poem is well done. I am honored to be among the mentioned in this contest.

    michael thomas


  • Green Lady
    November 13, 2007

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    Great rhythm to the verses. I really enjoyed the experiences you showed me. This one definitely stands out. ;p

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