Have you ever
felt the shadows descending
like fall leaves
coloured;
turning to brown
like wizened corpses,
frozen
on death's gurney,
mind slammed shut
behind barriers
of steel,
locked within
motionless abyss,
yet craving
zephyr's of death
to lay feathered fingers
across your soul
bestowing final release?
Author notes
Prompt - 'Have You Ever' (50 words or less), ending with a question mark.
47 words here.
In a list
A contest entry
- Have you ever...? by Exodus.
2550 points, ended November 27, 2007, 38 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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congrats on the trophy..beautiful poem with layers of meaning
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clever and brilliant!
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thist amazing and is powerfully written leaving the reader imaging the scene and everything
well done and best of luck gran
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Wowzers!!
Love this piece penned and done Powerfully under 50 lines
Wooooooooooo Hoooooooooooooo
Wonderful words...mind slammed shut
Ooooooooooooh and emotionless abyss
Keep that quill dancing!!
Thank You for sharing Your Talent!
Best wishes to You in the contest
Many blessings too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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I agree with Friday, this stands out uniquely and really grips the reader in. Beautifully worded.
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Thank you for adding the word count at the bottom, it is not a big things but it helps with the judging
. That said I really liked this, your descriptions and word usage were wonderful while the lay out worked well and still being easy to read Thanks again.
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i am not sure if i have craved zephyr's of death gaylene,,but i have felt shadows desend lovely poem good luck ppg xx
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I have... how did you read my thoughts.... sadly this is too true for so many... perfect write hun.
Karen
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