I was born beautiful,
someone maybe mummy could adore,
as I grew up I did not listen,
to those people who called mummy a whore.
I am beautiful
So what if daddy was never there,
hitting mummy around till she cried,
is not how you show a person you love her and care.
Mummy's boyfriend thinks I am Beautiful,
he comes into my room at night,
the things he does confuse me,
but he says it is alright.
The boys at school think I am beautiful,
I just have to shut up and agree,
as I let all different boys take it in turns,
as each one of them violates me.
I run away cause I am beautiful,
I deserve more out of my life,
I want to be loved by a man some day,
and made into his wife.
I work here cause I am beautiful,
my boss found me walking, cold and wet,
he says I am the best thing to happen in his
life and he is glad that we met.
Men pay me cause I am beautiful,
when they get to aggressive I do cry,
they tell me to shut up and take it like
a slut, I feel like I want to die.
I take drugs cause I am beautiful,
it helps me to forget so much pain,
the next day the buzz is gone,
everything is still the same.
I died beautiful,
my beauty the world just never seen,
I lay to rest now beautiful,
at the age of fifteen
Author notes
I wrote this last night after seeing something on tv, this poem was one of my most simple pieces I have wrote as it all just seemed to flow right, this has got to be one of the best writes I have wrote in a long time I feel hope you all get the message and enjoy the read.
A contest entry
- Children in need!!! by x-Black-Butterfly-x.
600 points, ended November 28, 2007, 6 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ♠ 4 Dark Options::Prewrites allowed ♠ by Manda Kathryn.
900 points, ended January 14, 2008, 40 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Can I Be Your Shooting Star Disaster--x by Dead Star--x.
475 points, ended March 5, 2008, 33 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Rhyme and Flow part 7 Old - 50,000 points series by cricketjeff.
4000 points, ended August 15, 2008, 36 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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awesome
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That was very well written i loved it because there are plenty of young girls out there that do face this issue and because of fear or to protect someone else they don't say anything and it always gets worse before it gets better if ever it does.
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Thank you for your entry in the contest with this interesting and hard hitting poem, although we feel it doesn't quite fir the theme 'Old'.
All the best in the judging.
Sue and Jeff
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oh this is defnitely a deserving trophey winner....wow.
never have i seen sch heartbreaking words that leave such a strong impact on the reader.
I died beautiful
like the comment before mine said ths is a tragic ending to a very tragic tale- no one deserves this in life. amazing powerful write, well done
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I died beautiful♥
sadly tragic ending
its a sad story but it does happen in this world much to my dismay
i wish there were more programs out there to prevent stories like this
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Intense
Wow my dear brother that was a totally intense poem! You carved a very beautiful image of innocence being mercilessly slaughtered by different happenings in society. The words were simple, direct, to the point and really raw and powerful! I also like the way your poem gives another meaning to beauty.
Been a long time since i heard from you, hope all is fine!
Take care!
Neera~
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Congrats on the gold!
This is an awesome write, the flow, meter and rhyme are superb. I love the story you told, simply put yet very hard hitting. Very well penned and so deserving of the gold and HM
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I've commented this babes
Thank you for your entry
Best of luck
Stay safe
~Manda
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WOWIE!
Man you have come a long way my friend. This is written so differently than many of your works, and I am just astounded! Awesome job!
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I am completly speechless... This is so sad and so real, you are an amazing poet James.
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I did enjoy the read, to a certain extent!! the flow and rhymes are excellent, I just found it very sad. Its really hard hitting, even more so as this kind if thing does happen.
Great write,
Sunny
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James son this is an excellent piece it tells a sad story with wonderful rhyme.That some young ladies feel the need to get recognition in such a way is indeed a sad state of affairs.Good luck in the contest
Dad
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Very moving - I love how simply it was written, fitting of a 15 year old girl who has been abused, where the emotional growth is stunted. I think you did an excellent job telling this story.
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I can see that you have a talent in writing poetry. It's a sad poem. it's sad that this kind of thing goes on in the world.
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sad story, all too familiar - what kind of world is this, where this story is familiar? Simply written, but the errors in spelling and grammar made the run of the story falter for me. And maybe too simplistic, laying the blame on the absent father, the unaware mother, the system that needs little boys like this.
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oh wowo
this literally had me in tears because it happen. and it was just wow it really drew me in. it was strong and powerful and just cpativated my heart and mind. well done and best of luck
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A very sad commentary on society as a whole. This happens far too often.
As for mechanics, I found this overly simplistic. I am not sure if your writing style is this disjointed, or if you actually write this way. There are several glaring grammatical issues. This does not really affect the spirit of the write, but I find that some of the lines could be improved to better convey your message.
Still, thank you for sharing.
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Wow james, you really have a way with words. This poem is so incredibly sad, I have not come to this site in such a long time, the first thing I did after posting a poem of my own, was come to your page. Your words are so powerful, this poem all straight in its simplicity was absoutely gripping. The thing that makes it more sad is because this is going on in the world, its happening right now and being swept under the rug.....
A great write. Well done
Mara
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Heavy
This poem is put together well. There are some parts that do convey a strong message: That beautiful girls are vulnerable and susceptible to mistreatment. Lug head men with no sense of compassion or humanity create scenarios like the ones in this poem, all too frequently. -
thanks.
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First of all I think that it's great how something so horrible has inspired you to write and to make it so feeling. Second I expected something very different and was surprised by the twist. I really liked this and it really made me feel for that person on TV. Well done
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This would be a good one for RainbowSouledChar 's comp for Children In Need - new up today! I really feel for these things you capture so intensely. x
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This is sad brother dear yet for so many true. I can see some of their faces and yes they are and were so beautiful. You words bring me to tears for so many young innocent girls and boys forced into the trade and treated less than human by their keepers and the tricks they turn who go home in many cases to their respected homes and children ...... I stand in respect for them and I applaud this write as a dedication to all those who have been made walk this path.
I can only give three clappy people but in my heart I give much more.
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Fuck Jamie this had me bloody crying
I hate you, you made me cry!
I love this write though, it is one of your best and the last line just broke the waterworks
This is so strong cause it's too damn real and true
Powerful Powerful
Stay safe
Love ya
~Manda
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