Have you ever
watched a man die?
That lifelight fading
in the failing pupils
of his weeping eyes.
Bloody lips whispering "Mom."
in a language foriegn to you,
yet still understood.
His bowels emptying
the reek of death
into air you breathe.
Have you ever wished
that hard for peace?
A contest entry
- Have you ever...? by Exodus.
2550 points, ended November 27, 2007, 38 entries
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Anyone who has been in combat- or loved someone who has been in combat- knows that there are things no human being should endure. You've captured the brevity and dark truth of war. My heart hurts to read these words and yet, I think everyone should have to read them, that we might never have to live them.
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Very true.
I just wanted to say that I really like your poem, and I completely understand what your saying. Me and my best friend Mike had a conversation about just this when he came back from Iraq. I like it a lot. -
Oh My God,This is truly a poem that shakes you up.
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wow, this was very powerful, so much emotion and imagery within so few words. well done
best of luck in the contest. be well and be blessed
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Wondering
Have you ever watched a friend die.
Eaten slowly from inside.
At war with cancer
and losing.
Never uttering a word
of complaint
Always smiling
as he endures
his final days,
hours and minutes.
Have you every watched
a friend die
as he dies inside
and outside
before your eyes.
And heard that final breath
as it fills the air
with his departure.
And miss him so much.
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Wow. That is the word that comes to mind - and it doesn't even come close. This is a very intense string of words, very touching. Great!
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Oh wow. I'm not quite sure what to say about this. It's so powerful and profound but at the same time one of those pieces that can be understood by all. Thank you
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