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At Dawn

Have you ever
felt the water from the lake
at morning's rise
as the flames engulf the skies
making every drop taste sweeter?

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again, I'll go with honest.

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  • Rain-Shot-Rose
    November 26, 2007

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    This was really beautiful. I felt like my eyes were on fire and I was almost burning but didn't feel it tearing apart my flesh. Well done.


  • Exodus gold member
    November 12, 2007

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    I think this could do with a little punctuation, but other than that I like it. You use beautiful language and the format isn't too messy. Thank you


  • R S Adams Jr silver member
    November 12, 2007

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    well done

    I like this succinct verse. The imagery is vivid and I can feel an emotion in your words. The last line presents an interesting concept to think upon.


  • crazziladi
    November 12, 2007
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    nice picture good luck