Have you ever seen a world
recreate itself
as to expand
the one in which it formed
or reflect within the eye
of its maker like a storm?
Author notes
Honest works for me, but before it's said, I know it's abstract.
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- Have you ever...? by Exodus.
2550 points, ended November 27, 2007, 38 entries
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i thougth this was very well written
in the first line waht world are you refering to
it could be the country life or the hood or city there are many different worlds that humans live in are you speaking literally or metaforically -
Love it abstract or not
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Makes you think I like it! good luck
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Abstract yes, but it works. Personally I think the third like could be phrased better, it just doesn't quite sit right with me, though that could be the way I'm reading it. Nevertheless, this is one of the better pieces I've read so far, thank you
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I decided to go the other route. let me know if it helped.
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