As silver flows with the crimson,
the metalic edge is lost in a sea of crimson,
the crimson spills and stains,
it's unbearable to watch.
Your eyes they fall blindly
watching the sea of crimson engulf everything,
everything is lost and stained with the crimson colour,
you life is filled with a blackened red and a unfilled heart.
One drowns in self petty,
lost love renews the old scares
making life unbearable,
even with the lost love you've found.
Author notes
this is writen for someone but they know who they are, i love them dearly
A contest entry
- suicide poems that don't suck by aeolia.
380 points, ended January 1, 2008, 104 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
meaning?
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"Your eyes they fall blindly
watching the sea of crimson engulf everything,
everything is lost and stained with the crimson colour,
you life is filled with a blackened red and a unfilled heart."
Nice images, really, but they're overshadowed and weakened by the passive construction of your sentences.
metalic -- metallic.
self petty -- self-pity.
Thanks for entering & good luck!
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wow this is beautiful... in that lil emo way of yours...
very poetic hippy. xx
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hmm.. would this be about the person i'm thinking about?? lol this is good
takes some comprehending though.. lol Xx
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xxEMZxx
it's about you by the way.
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