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V I I I.

the whisper of denim against flesh
the touch of fingers to hair
a sharp inhale
gurgle of copious amounts of alcohol
strobe lights make everything a blur
someone raves in the corner
glow sticks flashing
a hand slides up my thigh
"Are you nervous?"

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  • broken-colours
    November 12, 2007

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    Incredible. Such a short poem, but full of so much vivid imagery... "the whisper of denim against flesh... a sharp inhale". Marvelous. Yeah, so.. in short, I love this.


    • pointlessdayz
      November 12, 2007
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      Well, thank you! Glad you enjoyed reading it.

      Truth be told, this series I have going with the numbers for titles is sort of a journal.

      Still glad you liked it!

      -Alex