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Metamorphosis

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Metamorphosis

While working in the lab one happy day
You can call me weird but it’s how I play
I whipped up a potion it was darkish grey
Happy Chemist

The mob was mad and they were after me
So I thought I would use my chemistry
I made a concoction, it was acid free
Clever Chemist

I love chemistry and conjugate base
I mixed the solution with a sediment trace
And I drank it down just to change my face
Desperate Chemist

I drank from a beaker that was made of glass
I could feel the change in my molar mass
I dropped the thing and I fell on my ass
Broken Chemist

My skin turned soft from the sublimation
My eyes got sore from the dilation
I felt the change of the maturation
Dazed Chemist

The room spun around, it really did swirl
Then I woke up I thought I would hurl
I changed from a guy to a lovely girl
Miss Chemist

 

 

 

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  • Tirrell
    July 28, 2008

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    congrats on the silver this was a fun and surprising read, you definatly have style! Nice job with this one.


  • Auburn Sunrise gold member
    November 30, 2007
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    LOL

    Love the form and the humor!
    You are a source of constant surprise and enjoyment.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    November 26, 2007

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    You deserved a prize for cheek! However it was also very well rhymed and flows smoothly. I particularly liked the feminine rhymes in the fifth verse.
    And a great twist to end!


  • cricketjeff gold member
    November 26, 2007
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    How can I not put a rhyme about a chemist into the final?


    • Amera gold member
      November 26, 2007
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      hehe... you caught me; I read your bio and molded the poem for you.


  • Pisces Pieces
    November 15, 2007

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    Like I said...always will be amazed! This is fantastically cute and funny...perfect.

    I Love It!


  • HaleyMary
    November 13, 2007

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    lol. This is great, Sis. The ending is very humorous. I liked how you described the chemist in different ways throughout the poem. Great title, too. Goes well with the poem. Keep writing and good luck in the contest.


  • Desire gold member
    November 13, 2007

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    OMG!!



    Oooooooooooooooooooooh a spin on the Dr. Jekyll and Mr. Hyde
    Love this!!

    I wanted to hear more
    Gosh that gives a whole new meaning to sex-change


    Loved it and the Humor You brought forth
    Best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • second-born
    November 13, 2007

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    this is truly one enjoyable metamorphosis that I've read...the ending is superb and I liked how you've written in such a way that you're just telling a story to children...lovable like you!!!


  • seamaiden
    November 13, 2007

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    OMG, I love the surprise ending in this. Was this Dr. Jekyll turning into a Ms. Hyde? lmao When I saw the title I was thinking more along the lines of a butterfly. This gave me a good laugh to start my morning with and thank my lucky stars that it is coffee I drink and not any chemist's potions. hehe You have a wonderful sense of humor. Good luck in the contest. This is so good. Keep writing poet. seamaiden ♥


  • Denierim
    November 12, 2007

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    This is a marvelous piece of art that brought a smile on my face! I like how you described the life of a chemist who's desberate to try out the things he creates (that's how I saw it). At the beginning it seemed to follow old patterns but it got very unique and unseen to the end and I simply love that fact! Through the obvious story, there are very deep thoughts I could find behind this and that's one of the reasons I fell in love with this piece. It's deeper than it shows.

    You did a wonderful work with this one, and I can but imagine the chemist turning to a woman...


  • jo-el
    November 12, 2007

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    i like how you put this together. the way you build on the story from stanza to stanza. and its interestin the changes the chemist goes through. clever and humour turns in this tale all the way to the disturbing twist at the end lol. nicely done


  • StarEyes
    November 12, 2007

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    Your talent knows no bounds!!! What a tale you have spun in these words! This is fantastic!! Love that ending!!

    Best of luck in this contest!!

    and love

    Nyetta


  • PerVirtuous
    November 12, 2007

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    Link this to DK! This was a riot! I laughed all through it. I expected it to go where it did, but still it was fun. I am amazed once again at the acessability you can put into such a restrictive form. Kudos to you, my princess.


  • grannyeri gold member
    November 12, 2007

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    Think we all try writing a poem with this title - know I have. Quite the tale you tell in these lines. Liked the flow, the rhythm, rhyme and ending. Easy to read and understand what is going one here.


  • Griswold
    November 12, 2007

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    ROFLMAO, I wonder, did he add Mydol to that mix? I read this to Monster Mash in my head, worked good for me. Well done, good luck...Scott

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