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Day of Destiny (Part IV)

As I bear witness to this moment of divinity

Fallen is thy sword; solemn is thy guise

And with grace, this dainty soul yields her arms to thee

Astonished might I be this savior in the eyes

Of what was to become a piteous remnant of death

 

Whose very image hath wrought a battle in mind

 

Of this man who can't summon a breath

 

As he embraces such a beauty with a tender bind

 

As we part she gives unto thee a gratuitous gaze

 

With the passion of one wont to kiss...

 

However, quite nigh, there spawns a blaze

 

With townsfolk stampeding like cattle, it must be something amiss

 

Leading the  by the hand, I place her upon the stallion

 

Blazes stormed the city like a plague; and so off the lady rode

 

Through the flame emerged a winged beast; a one part battalion

 

So toward thy sword I strode...

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  • Tenshi Asakura
    December 14, 2007

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    As always the first line of them poem captivates me! wow, did i see some foreshadowing in there? i love the rhyme scheme, reminds me of Anglo-Saxon type epic poems. for a moment it seemed like the woman was throwing herself at the character. Regret, guilt, and love unrequited, its getting more interesting. Can't wait to read V


  • RedwingSpirit silver member
    November 12, 2007
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    I like this poem but. needs some end punct. Other tthan that it is Excellent Cara


    • jinpachi
      December 21, 2007
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      Yeah...but I like to be loose. Have you enjoyed the series thus far? Your are an impressive poet. I'm always eager to read your critiques. A lovely Christmas to you!