Like detectives desperate for a confession,
these noisy bullies make unfair deals.
Their brains completely surrounded
but for the empty spaces
where smoke and fear lies.
Thinking they'll fit in agreeing
with any complement they'll pay
as ovbiously vain as nature.
Author notes
Just watching my friends being taken into drugs dragged along by their peers. their peers in this case being their bullies.
Please tell me what you think
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Very powerful words here. And your imagery is quite frightening. I like it.
Dont do drugs kids!
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Short but powerful. Emotionally intense, but not the least bit whiney. Strong message that can be taken to heart by all of us young or old. Even adults have a tendency to be dragged to a fro by peers who arent necessarily doing the best things.
Thanks for your entry -
so short but so sweet!!!
nice one! you gota get your new stuff up... so do i but yup
as always keep it up!!!
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This poem was definitely worth the read. The alliteration in the first line is mega effective. I think its cool that you didn't put any background to this poem. It is striking the way it is. Well I reckon so anyway
Adam !!
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hey hunny!
so far so good!
great use of words,
do u mean unfinnished asin the poem itself isnt comleted?
ye probly
anyhoo how r u? we havent tlked in like years!!
love you tons and tons
hope to c u soon
sincerely
your tomoto
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