(.M.a.l.e.)
I asked you here knowing you’d come
To join me until we pale and die.
A life of love and evil surrounds,
Forever just you and I.
(.F.e.m.a.l.e.)
I bring myself to you,
My love, to share with you,
An eternity of darkness,
A nightmare that is our dreams.
(.M.a.l.e.)
When you bleed I shall drink your crimson tears,
And when you jump I shall fall with you.
And if we never land then I’ll simply hold you
And make sure no pain courses through your veins.
(.F.e.m.a.l.e.)
I shall remain yours forever
My eyes never straying from your golden orbs.
I shall help you hide the bodies,
I shall never tell a soul.
(.M.a.l.e.)
Please take this ruby ring
And never forget the way,
Your love for me is imprinted
On my soul
Forever.
(.F.e.m.a.l.e.)
Kiss me while I’m breathing
And never forget the way,
Your love for me is imprinted
On my soul
Forever.
Author notes
#6 - Vows (Make some up or enter the ones you read.)
i was going for the adams family type vows.. all death and everything but they still love each other... like i said, i dont normally write this sorta stuff..
special thanks to spocky58 for the help.. AKA - Sliding_
A contest entry
- 67th Contest by Tarja.
450 points, ended November 12, 2007, 3 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Wowness!
I am extremely impressed this is raw quality poem sis and yet it is really masterfully penned. what really got me the most was the lines by the female saying:
(.F.e.m.a.l.e.)
I shall remain yours forever
My eyes never straying from your golden orbs.
I shall help you hide the bodies,
I shall never tell a soul.
I really found those lines to be the highlight of your Silver Trophy poem here. The contest holder really deserves an applause as well as she made an excellent choice in giving you the silver because this is just a beauty of a poem. any ways excellent poem all round and really love and admire the words you used through out this poem and how you broke it down and portrayed who said what to each other. keep up the Grrrrrrrrreat work as you earn my 3 applauses
Bro
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Oh what beautiful vows! A precious read indeed. Congratulations on this well deserved silver
Gaylene
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This was a unique piece. I liked the way you went back and forth between man and woman. Was this a collab? Well either way, it was well written and original. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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Nup.. But spocky helped...
he was too tired to write.lol. nd thank you for the comment.
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3 golden orbs
they're really kinda spooky , I like it , its crazy and many should be able to relate to it , if not......... remember to bury them deep. -
"I shall help you hide the bodies,
I shall never tell a soul."
Lol Random. Strange thing is, I thought straight away of Uncle Fester. I have problems though so that explains it!
Luffers you hunni bunni, good luck in the contest
♥♥♥
Bandaid
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LMAO!!! Well I WAS going for the Adams family thing... I guess it worked!! Debbie is a biatch who died! YAY
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LOL random as the guy who was wearing a tail
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