Don't ever forget that I love you
and that you are my final thought
My heart is in such agony
My mind so deeply distraught
I'm so sorry for everything
I don't know how to make it right
So much pain and confusion I've caused
Because I came to you that night
I had to find something to take it away
I can't find a way out this time
I can't organize my thoughts
and I lied, I'm really not fine
There's no one for me to run to
No one to hold my hand
No one to tell me it will be all right
There's no one who can understand
I'm not waiting for tomorrow
It's not going to come
That would be just like waiting for you
When I know you're already gone
I drowned in all of the emotions
when you brushed the hair from my face
I feel like I can't breathe
and the memories will not erase
You are the only one I cry for
I'm sorry I couldn't let you see
I didn't know it would feel like this
So I'll make it stop, so selfishly
The water in the bath is done running now
it's time for me to go
Reality is that I love you
maybe I should have told you so
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I am glad you wouldn't consider taking your own life.
However, once again, you wrote this with chilling insight.
I love the bit about him brushing the hair from your face - a nice touch.
Your poems flow so perfectly, so easily. As if writing is effortless for you, and reading your poems is just as simple.
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Very Nice
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Thank you for reading! As I said, I would never behave like this or do anything like this, but I take ideas and go with it
You're very sweet and kind, and I truly appreciate it!!
♥
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Wondreful and filled with emotion. It's true how we sometimes push that which is dear to us away by simply letting them know that we love them. This flowed so well tith the abcb rhyme scheme.
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Okay, if I didn't know that you were exaggerating, I'd have been really worried. Lol.
Well, I suppose if I minus the exaggeration, I can see what you mean here.
The poem in itself is really sweet, but in a really, really sad way... if I wasn't happy and sort of in a mood where I resist sad emotions, I would probably cry.
Anyway, I hope we can chat soon... I have something to tell you.
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AYE YIE YIE YIE YIE YIE!
AH! AH! YOU got me! I'm going down, that is soooo some of the things I have been thinking lately that has my mind at a temporary ... blank. Yet I see there some kind hope. The thing you must face is there must be, am I right? I guess when I start feeling like I don't know. Whatever it is made ya poop out a dang good poem. (Yes I said poop hahaha laugh childern laugh!) But wow I really really liked this. Especially the last lines. They were like the end of a mozart song. Where it alllll getts quiet...mmmm..Good one.
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Truly an emotional write. So much anguish and frustration and turmoil lurking about in the words penned here. Hindsight is never a good thing. Learned a long time ago that is often better to expose ones self than to never know. Wonderfully done my friend..just wonderful
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beautiful and compelling.
i love it.
and its amazing how powerful the last lines are.
always fantastic mom,
<3
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Thank you, you're always so sweet
Of course I would never do anything like what this might imply but...
Definitely contains elements of my true feelings, I built on that... *sniffle*
hmmm, anyway...thank you again!
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Oh my this is so dark! The story is captivating, I couldn't wait to find out what happened. I couldn't see how the title came into play until the last stanza. Well done! I like this quatrain and the abcb rhyme scheme.
Love,
Amera♥
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Thank you Amera...I appreciate your read and comments so very much!
It's funny you mentioned the title because I wasn't satisfied with it at all...nothing really fitting would come to me...but I think I may have come up with one so I'll probably change it.
Thank you, thank you, thank you
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Michele
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