One eye more open than others
Holding tight to expectations
Diluting truth with personal delusion
Maiming the innocence
Selfishly contorting
The ego holds no grasp on reality
Burning away the beauty
Now free for the taking
Humble wrists strain
Purity scratching a souls face
The chimes sound
Almost there
Hungry fingers look for new meaning
Meaning forms countless tongues
Believe in miracle
Swimming hair soaks up the sweetness
A sugary dream
Handling their light
Slight fear of combustion
Must be precise or it could turn sour
So many now
Eye closing, did you see?
Author notes
It feels vague, but if you read into it it's very precise thoughts
A contest entry
- Give Me Subtle Blood (adult) by MessedupMarionette.
950 points, ended November 26, 2007, 5 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Wait a minute... BAILEY?!?! When did you get good? jkjk. I had NO IDEA this was you... wow. I'm confused now.
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aww... i won bronze! I don't really like this poem much, but it is what it is.
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I like how you opened and closed the poem. It really gave it a whole sense. I have to admit, I read this poem several times in order to figure it out haha. It was full of contrasting words and images of which I am always a fan. Awesome poem and good luck in the contest
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Wow, definately loving this contest!!! Wonderful, wonderful entry, giving my first fave a run for it's money!!! I love this, it's really beautiful--I love the vague feel of it, the instant berage of images is wonderful. Great job and good luck!
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