Self forgiveness lay
buried beneath an avalanche
of blundering boulders,
freezing thoughts to
'what if' memories
unchangeable.
Frost bites cheeks
in crystallized streams spilled
from swelling glaciers
and hope,
falls victim to dehydration.
Taking pity,
silence speaks wisdom
to once deaf ears;
apparition's grace rises
with promises
of anew,
and from nature's clutches
evolution takes hold,
sparing mortality to teach
lessons learned.
Author notes
Image Credit goes to Idle mind wondering
In a list
A contest entry
- PIF Image inspired = reopenend by Idle Mind Wondering.
1050 points, ended November 20, 2007, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
1 - 17 of 17
-
Renewal is the word that comes to mind after reading this. It's refreshing and thoughtful. Well deserving of the shiny bling
-
I am completely stunned. The talent and wisdom I see flying from these pages, well, I guess it's best I stick close to the ground for now. Really WOWED!
ya All~Ways,
~ Jan ~
-
This is really good. I've thought of these things before, but have never quite been able to put them into words as skillfully as you have here. I'm not surprised you won the gold. Great poem! Keep up the good work.
Vhoori
-
The first three lines of this poem struck a chord with with me, Belle. Self forgiveness will carry us to the true meaning and compassion of forgiveness towards others.
Nothing past can be changed, but we forge ahead with resolution once we free ourselves from the grasp of those deeds which haunt us.
And congratulations on the Gold for this one, it's a much deserved award
Dee
-
excellent
the last three lines say it all -
ahum
-
I actually have no idea what to say here
-
Taking pity silence speaks wisdom to once deaf ears. This was a true gem for a stanza. Congrats on the gold well deserved
-
Such an interesting take on this prompt and well written. Congratulations on the gold. Well done. ~Pamela
-
This has a wide range of possibilities. I like its rebirth / self awareness and sense of enlightenment through - nonreligious - grace of silence.
well done! -
-
So pleased you enjoyed this piece Ken
I simply ran with what I saw in the instant I saw the picture. Thank you for another amazing picture of inspiration
-
-
OMG! Girl, I can SO relate to this one. I love your language in this. It's absolutely stellar. The metaphors are exceptional, and the message is one we should endeavor to commit to heart. LOVE where you went from te artwork that was presented to you, dear one. You did it proud!! KUDOS!!!
-
Excellent writing, hon!
Have to agree that this is one of your best!
All the best to you in this contest! -
definitely something to think and ponder on darling sister. Some of your best work yet... you know that I love when you put something up that makes me think and look deeper within.
hugs darling
chryss -
"avalanche
of blundering boulders,
freezing thoughts to
'what if' memories"
heavy solid still
I like -
Very nicely done, have not seen much from you lately, and this is just what I would expect, brilliance. Best of luck...Scott
-
Wow
It's been awhile since you've posted and this had just blown me away. There's a few ways you can take this piece I think. Goodluck in the contest.
Lil
Adding your comment:
1 - 17 of 17
