The Angel of peace whispers in my ear
it's time for you to find love my dear.
It's in your heart, real and true,
doing good deeds shows the love inside you.
You have a temperament inside that shows,
within you have a love that grows.
Inward deep but hard to see
you have a way to let it be.
Forgiveness lies inside your heart
that's just where you need to start.
It is true, do not give up,
no need to empty true love's cup.
Filled to the brim, a love so true
no matter what you're told to do.
Give it time, a need to pray
God will guide true love today.
A contest entry
- From Trash to Treasure by star wars fanatic.
1500 points, ended February 22, 2008, 18 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I really like this, a little too good for an improvement contest. lol I only have one thing that really bothers me: The term ghost just doesn't go. I understand what you meant, but "angel" would fit much better, or "spirit" or something. You know what I mean? Well, thx for entering, and let me know what you think about the comments.
P.S. Just one other thing, check all your caps. There are some things in lower case that need to be capitalized, I think. -
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Angel Whisper Of Love
I took your advice on my poem and edited it from "Ghost Whisper Of Love" to "Angel Whisper Of Love."
It might not show up on the contest page as being edited but I did edit it. And I capitalized some that should be capitalized. Thanks for your comments on my poem.
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