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Lover or Liar

Lover or liar-
                  how can one be sure?
If the bite is a venom           
                              or a cure
Swelling of the heart- of joy?
        or of the blood that's lost?
Lost...
        loss...
                  ...loss of breath...
Anxiety or Euphoria?

Pin-prick, a tickle
                          a trickle
Lover or a liar,
                      why must he be so fickle?


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  • N e a r
    February 29, 2008

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    I like the thoughts displayed in this write. The questions add more depth to it as well, since the writer is trying to dig deep in their emotions to figure out what the other person really is. The rhyming at the end was a good stretch for this poem, and I think it helped build onto the flow. Great job!

    Thanks for entering your write in "Enter All Your Love Writes Here!", and good luck!

    M a r l u x i a


  • sunflowers21573
    November 24, 2007
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    Holy cow- I loved this one. I love the line, "If the bite is a venom or a cure". Awesome piece.