Lost a friend,
Lost a life,
Found a cause,
Found a knife,
Found a vein,
Shed a tear,
Words you whipered,
In my ear,
All were lies,
The crimson tears,
Gave me proof,
Confirmed my fears,
If I wasnt dead before,
Just look at me now,
You killed me,
Yet you dont know how!
Author notes
I wrote this to go with a picture I drew.
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Comments
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wow this is freakin amazing!!! id love to see the picture. my favorite part of it all was probably the way it rhymed perfectly, its like made the entire poem more powerful, anways fantastic job
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whoa! this is some deep stuff. the rhyme was great. it just flowed. this was awesome. i am completely awestruck! this was my favorite part:
Found a cause,
Found a knife,
Found a vein,
Shed a tear,
Words you whipered,
In my ear,
this is an amazing piece!
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thankyou so much! I wrote this just ebfore writers block, and havent written anything im that proud of since.
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Brilliant, kept me hooked totally throughout.
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Thankyou
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wow! its so gd & has such a gd rythm! deffenetly 1 of ur best
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Thankyou!
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Great poem!
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Thankyou so much
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Very well done! I enjoyed the flow of the poem as the emotion that came through.
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You were quick to comment! Thankyou so much!
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