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Is this love?

Every time I see you with her,
it makes me want to run and hide.
I watch you gaze into her eyes
and wonder what you are feeling inside.

That feeling doesn't last long.

My love always interrupts before long.

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  • RedwingSpirit silver member
    March 5, 2008

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    Oh your to young to worry about these sort of things yet. got a long life ahead of you boys will come and go. They are immature till they are 40 just kidding not all but most This one is very well written like it Dear


  • SpydurPoet gold member
    November 11, 2007
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    Wow. The overall feeling that this poem gave me was that of an akward one, like an ex walking in the same park as that of someone and their own someone new...
    You did a fantastic job with this.
    The second line, I would add an 'it' to the beginning of the line.
    Write on!
    ~*~SP~*~