Moquitos
suck the blood out of their hosts;
and,in return,
give them diseases.
Humans
soak themselves in the nectar of earth;
and,in return,
gift her chaos.
Mosquitos
make us poison ourselves.
Humans
choke the lungs of their own mother.
Goodness!
I can't believe
how many siblings i have swatted!!
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content-7.3
vocabulary-9
accuracy-7.6
creativity-7.5
theme-7.5
originality-7.4
totals-46.3
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wah!!
i mean it!!! THIS is Vinay!! VERY good! The last line HITS you like anything. "Bloody brilliant" 
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