when love rises
the haters fall
when the moon rises
the sun falls
when the good in our hearts arrives
the evil with in us disapears all
when the light arrives
the darkness falls above all
when the moon shines brighter than the sun in our hearts
the love is growing for every chance it gets
when the sun gets stronger in our hearts
we make our love bigger for what we get
a different part of us falls apart
the hate we start to forget
the love heals what broke apart
and those loving faces we will never forget
Please tell me what you think
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a fan truly
i love the first and second stanza. I enjoy the rise and fall contrast that you displayed so well.
Wonderful
Oneal
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Awww....
this is so powerful. very beautiful write -
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no problem it wasn't anything
thank you
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This is excellent a feel I've had in a long time!
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dats good atleast i know i can write stuff that makes ppl happy
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Wow great poem it has nice imagery! I love the poems form I like the line "The love heals what broke apart"
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thanks a bunch it takes time to add new things cause well no time
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Hey dude, thats cool. Its true.
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thanks
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This sounds very much about healing that breaking up and it is a promising feel I get that things are, or will get better. I hope so!!! Showing that love was very strong all the time! Nice job,
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thanks a bunch glad u liked it
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bravo.. nice improvement my friend.. nice growth and some thing different.. now ifeel that you have things hidden in ur sleeve..
this is very well penned and im sure it will get better from here..
what all u lacked in ur previous writes u have made it up in this..
keep the ink flowin
ma salaam
abuyi
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thanks glad u enjoyed it
i no right i lack love in the other ones
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viewed by me
nice write,
kudos to yous
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thanks glad u liked it
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Very nice, don't see you rhyming very often...nor do I see you write about love... its a nice change.
There's a gentle feel to this and I enjoyed reading it very much. Thanks for sharing it daughter mine
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thanks dad glad u liked it
i no i have a lot more to add that's like this love you
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