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Bleeding out

You turn to me and I see that glint in your eye,
I recognize the look and know I'm about to die.
I saw this end before I let it begin,
But this is my way of life and start again.

I guessed the end, I guessed the truth,
You denied it, you deny the truth.

Now I'm sitting in this castle and I'm bleeding out,
I've scraped away my throat in my need to shout.

And you are so far away, ruthless, truthless.

Like buckets of blood, like a head on a pike,
Like shameful reactions, like a corpse on a spike.
As swords are to flesh, as bullets to my face,
As toxins in the blood, and eyes are to Mace.
I feel your memory.

I guessed the end, I guessed the truth,
You denied it, you deny the truth.

Now I'm sitting in this castle and I'm bleeding out,
I've scraped away my throat in my need to shout.

And you are so far away, ruthless, truthless.

Bleed it out,
Bleed out the memory.
Bleed it out,
Bleed out the pain.
Bleed it out,
Bleed out the dreams.
Blead it out.
I'm bleeding you out.

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  • Metaphorist
    November 20, 2007

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    Wow. Very well done. Rhyme scheme was great. The repeated lines worked. You have improved so much! Keep it up!
    One criticism- line 4 sounds a little awkward.