Beyond the hills, beyond the sea
Eludes my thoughts in a careless spree..
To the farthest realm..
In search of a dream..
When the sky is kissed by the morning's sun
Like the finishing touch, to a painting done,
Tender feelings take their flight
Fluttering free like the colorful kite,
Fastened tight to unseen strings,
My delicate heart merrily sings..
Farther they fly, in a steady pace
Seeking their way with as much grace,
While time swiftly strides
Thoughts of grandeur, in tranquil glides,
To reach the territory beyond the lines,
Before the first star of night time shines.
And higher they fly, carried by the breeze,
Just like a feather, moving with ease..
To the farthest realm
In search of a dream..
In a list
A contest entry
- Who can Object by Legend.
1800 points, ended November 15, 2007, 14 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I got lost in this poem... and I mean that in a very good way! Interesting I used similar imagery of the artist's finishing touch in a poem I wrote today before seeing this. One I will come back to. Thanks for sharing!
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Wow. This is the most beautiful poem I have ever read on this site, and I don't think I'll ever forget reading this peice! I love the imagery, and your word choice is amazing! I didn't read the other entries in the contest this poem was entered in, but I think this deserved more than an honorable mention. So . . .inspirational and full of wonder was this peice. GREAT JOB!
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beautiful...
elegant, and dream like. I loved the way you painted a picture[including the picture for this poem, suits it well]. I liked how you made this poem flow freely like a sonnet of some sort. Very beautiful, it's one of those poems you just want to re read over and over because it just captures the reader and the mind of the reader. Absolute amazing poem =]
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Great
Oh, you are a romantic. Your dreams fly high and far afield. This is a beautiful piece and reminded me not to forget to dream.
This brightened my morning. Thank you.
CaliOkie
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Amazing that us grounded creatures can fly in our dreams and you do it well. an uplifting write!
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Oh I loved this so much!!! This was magical and delightful as daydreaming and real and fulfilling as achieving our God-given purpose!!! This was very lovely indeed!!!
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this was a very sweet poem and just took me to a happy place, great job
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Such a mellifluous poem
with grace and beauty as hallmarks. The American Dream shines through.
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Thanks much Ron
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enjoyed your write very much
You did well in keepin ones interest all the way throught your write....mac
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I love this!
enjoyed every single line!
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Reading this was a very pleasant experience, like a whimsical daydream.
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To the farthest realm..
In search of a dream..The repetition of these 2 lines works perfectly. I 'watched' the feather moving with ease slowly and yet so gracefully. Beautiful word choice. I wish you good luck with this poem - Von
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Thank you Von I appreciate your comments much.... 'm glad u liked it..
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Beautiful
Very nicely penned, beautiful flow and rhyme too. A most stunning write indeed and a real pleasure to read. Your work is always calming to the eye. Well done and good luck with this gorgeous entry.
Shaz xx
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Thankyou Shaz.. for the sweet comment. Very cheering indeed..
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Raspberry what a pleasure it is to find one of you wonderful pieces entered.I know that i will have a joyous read as soon as i clicked. I wasn't wrongs Beautiful rhyme and flow.Good luck in the contest
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Legend.. I'll never be let down by your comments. Always uplifting Thank you immense...
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