she coughed up lungs
and vomited betrayals--
smoking too often
while fucking
too many
Author notes
second try; 14 words;
♥
Comments
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Love that last stanza. Maybe because fuck and all of its fellow forms have joined my "most loved words" clique.
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i've rubbed one out to poems this remarkable before...
BRB.
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hehe. Nice job on the title. I like the play of words. It paints a true picture.
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oh wow. this is so amazing and incisive! in such few words you made such an impact. I love the metaphor and the power in which you executed it.
Simply breathtaking <3
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