hid liquor
in fuse-boxes,
hoped
he’d stay
clean.
blamed myself
after the power outage.
Author notes
first attempt; 14 words;
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ooooh wow. i love it.
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You already know what I think about this.
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Lots of tragic stories out there about alcohol, I've known one or two personally. But on the positive side. I do know one success story about an alcoholic and drug abuser, so...
Anyway, I like the title, though if based on experience, I'm sorry.
By power outage, do you mean his death? If so, that's creative, though the reality is sad.
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I try to leave it open to interpretation in the piece itself, but as for the way I personally see/meant it... I uncharacteristically prefer a more literal view in this.
it's referencing back to the fuse-boxes and implying that he found the liquor when the power went out... one of the few times people actually have any need to look inside their fuse-boxes.
but I'm glad you saw the broader, metaphorical take, too. I hoped people would see it differently.
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Wow.
this was good. amazing, actually. You put so much emotion in such a small amount of words. This poem really made me sad, which is the best quality a poem can have, inspiring emotion.
This was wonderful.
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unique.
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