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Stars in Our Eyes

Bright eyes cascade with prismatic naivety,
without a worry or care of life's brevity.
All day to live our lives in decadent bliss,
then all too soon is felt the adolescents' kiss.
Any trace of innocence fades along with the stars in our eyes,
though we try to hold on to virtue by clinging onto the skies.
But we are forbidden this gift no matter how high we climb,
ours are lives dependent upon the evil master, time.
Soon our vision becomes distorted and the sparkle fades,
a dark landscape is all that remains of once brilliant shades.
Where once we only cared to see in black and white,
now we must care to read between the lines into what's wrong or right.
The last light disappears as our innocent sight goes blind,
and we open our eyes, void of naivety, leaving childhood behind.

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rose blood 87-option 5

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  • leander Moderators member
    January 15, 2008

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    I really like the way you have finished this poem. That is a very strong and powerful line you have there If only most people who grow from childhood into adolescence lose their naivity huh

    Thanks for another entry!
    Leander

  • David Houston
    November 27, 2007

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    Very serene, well done

    I love this, especially, "the stars in our eyes." It makes me think of stars, galaxies, and many cool ideas, like we are star dust, or related to them. And Einstein and relativity, and that baby, the moon, shooting stars and millions more. Thanks for this gem, i feel a riddle coming on. Best Wishes.


  • poet2angels gold member
    November 12, 2007

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    lovely imagery and beautiful rhyme!
    This is such a wonderful take on the prompt! Great job

    Lynda


  • Errant Panther gold member
    November 11, 2007

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    lovely take on the photo prompt, great rhyming and child dreamlike imagery, well done and best wishes to you.