Dreaming into a living that makes you go blind
where everybody you see is kind
you can't really visualize the colors around
but if you listen real hard you can pick up the sounds
people crossing traffic in their minds
until they take time to set aside
they will see through the ground just to find
the answers to life which can't be defined
if it's just the best thing in the world
or if it's just another twirl
the truth be yours and the question be thick
that should be enough to get through this trick
travel toward time but stay in the past
and remember not to take off your mask
that holds a lot of fears
a lot of ambitions that use to be there
when all situations lead to a devious end
know that you have a route which can bring you up again
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a lot of ambitions that use to be there
when all situations lead to a devious end
know that you have a route which can bring you up again
Well I love the description part which is indeed very impressive and touching the visual scenario of the task..well done..adn thanks for sharing such a wonderful work.. -
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Thank you a lot, it means much to me. I wish more people would comment my work, but I can't get out there it's hard. But thanks wise friend
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I liked it. It did not inclde very complex word that confuse me which was another helpful thing about it and added to the poem. Good job.
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Sigh inside a deeper sky of wild blue whispers and scented streams...to carry blush in strange new flowers...thanks so much
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the familiar tone of this poem will allow more people to enjoy it. Simple words, yet so full of hope. Very uplifting message. I find the line "travel toward time but stay in the past" very interesting.
great write
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