You said you would always protect me,
Keep me safe from harm,
But you weren't there,
When demons attacked my soul.
Five years of Hell,
In a Devil's playground,
I was so lost and confused,
I needed you but you were nowhere to be found.
I'd see your smiling face,
Every now and then,
You promised you'd get me out,
But it never did happen.
You let my foolish innocent heart,
Believe every lie you said,
Now after years of tears and pain,
That part of me is dead.
Still you try to tell me,
"The way it really was"
But you forget,
I was there.
I was the victim,
The tiny toddler walking around on shaky legs,
Who got thrown around,
And had to sleep in a stranger's bed.
You don't seem to understand,
Exactly how I feel,
All the bleeding wounds and scars,
the never seem to heal.
A part of me still hates you,
For all you have or have not done,
A part of me wants to love you,
The little girl lost inside still says you're number one.
I want to forgive you,
Let my battered heart be free,
But how can I forget,
When the nightmares sill claw at me?
Do you not understand,
I will never be the same?
My fragile wings are shattered,
My soul is filled with pain.
All these feelings,
I'm forced to tuck away inside,
And behind a battered wall,
That Little Girl does cower and hide.
She begs me to forgive you,
She wants me to believe,
All the lies you tell,
But my scars refuse to leave.
Daddy do you not hear me screaming?
Do you not hear me shout?
Can you not feel my black pain?
Will you not let me out?
I'm so wrapped up in your damn lies,
I don't know where to turn.
I want to know the fucking truth,
I guess I'll never learn.
Now the doctor's say,
Your time has finally come,
Soon your time on earth,
Will be over and done.
The little girl cries,
For she doesn't want you to go,
But the wounded woman laughs,
Payback for all the pain she had to know.
A part of me will pity you,
A part of me does hate,
A part of me wants to love,
But I fear it may be too late.
Too late for me to forgive you,
Too late to get back all the innocence I have lost,
Too late to be that stupid little girl,
That YOU conveniently forgot!
Author notes
Emotion~Overrated~Underappreciated~Overwhelming
A tribute to my 'father' and all the years of hell i went through that he will never accept responsibility for... Now he's dying. Karma's a bitch isn't it? *Cheers* I'm aligurl
A contest entry
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"You let my foolish innocent heart,
Believe every lie you said,
Now after years of tears and pain,
That part of me is dead."
My feelings for this poem are fully realized in how I feel about these quoted lines...
I hate them. I want to tear them apart steal away the hurt that gave them life.
But I cannot. This poem is ugly, but it is also beautiful. The innocent little girl and woman made wise through pain, negligence and betrayal...ugly and beautiful...
This is a very powerful poem. I am not a fan of traditional rhyme scheme, not my cup of tea. But I didn't even notice. It was that good.
Bitterness is a poisonous tea. Don't drink it.
Well done, well done indeed.
Blessings,
C
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This is really filled with emotion and pain. You did a great job expressing your feelings. I'm sorry that you had to go through this.
thanks for entering. -
About the rhyme and the flow, I'm with InsanelyMysterious. I wasn't comfortable with the poem at all. But you got a gold, so you don't need my endorsement
and I'm notoriously picky. Congratulations on the trophy.
I very much appreciate the personal nature of this work, and the strong, mixed emotions of the situation - the lifetime - it describes. For that, if for nothing else (and there IS much more there) I am going to give you a couple of claps.
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Its a great poem although the rhyme is forced a little and the flow is broken in some area. but there is alot of emotion in it and its a little easier to get past the breaks in the flow and follow the emotion. Its a great poem though.
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Very moving
It's filled with such emotion, I felt your pain while I was reading this poem. Fantastic write.
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hey this has really hit close to home. im sorry you had to go through it but there is a light at the end of the tunnel. i often wonder what i would do if i found out my dad was sick wether i would rejoice or be sad. i have to ask thou how do you deal with the mixed feeligns of love and hate towards him? awesome writing chicky stay strong.
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It's sad to know that so many people go through this kind of abuse. Very well written, very emotional.
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Having been ...
an abused child, I know exactly how you feel. I also know that it helps sometimes to vent, but in the end, you have to put it behind you and move on. No one can make up to you for what your father did, but at the same time, you don't have to let it scar you permanently, or at least you don't have to let it dictate how you will live and spoil whatever chance you might have to find happiness. Have you read Desiderata? You might want to do that.
As far as the poem goes, it's poignant and powerful, but it has no chance in this contest. The writing is not stellar, and what makes this a good poem is emotion, but that's not what I'm looking for in this contest. I will undoubtedly have other contests for other things, but this contest is for good writing, period.
Keep a stiff upper lip, leave the old fool to his own devices or whatever Fate has in store for him, and move on.
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Wow...so emotional and beautifully written. I can completely feel every feeling you threw into this poem; it feels very raw and real. Stunning writing. Im sorry you had to go through this. I hope you're getting past it now- I can relate in some ways to the emotions but not the situation.
Happy new year- I hope this ones better
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**Oh Yeah, Thanks for the entry and Good Luck in the contest
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This is a strong peice and it surely strikes out and yells it's message, however the only 'issue' I found while reading this is your not very fluent in your rhyme scheme, Some verses nail it and are masterfully written but then it was preceeded by a 'not so easy' verse that made the bumps in the poem. I did like the conveying of the bitter and lost emotions in the write however, showing that you took the subject of which ou wrote serious and focused your mind around it.
She begs me to forgive you,
She wants me to believe,
All the lies you tell,
But my scars refuse to leave.
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I'm so wrapped up in your damn lies,
I don't know where to turn.
I want to know the fucking truth,
I guess I'll never learn.
I know thats alot to quote but this is the part that I enjoyed in this piece, the upper verse I believe is the a good flow and the lower, well I just liked that verse. =) -
great sad write well done
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