Spinning the gun in Russian Roulette
Her life is at stake and you're making a bet
No matter how crazy and sad she may get
You're still spinning the gun in Russian Roulette
And all the rules remain the same
In your little spin-the-pistol game
You're the voice in her head that tells her to kill
Playing your murderous game for a thrill
Stealing all her latitude
The virus with an attitude
Chaotic schizophrenic scare
Her absolutely worst nightmare
Spinning the gun in Russian Roulette
Just for sadistic dark pleasure you'll get
Her life is at stake and you're making a bet
Just a wish to escape your Russian Roulette
Author notes
November 10, 2007.... this is about the voice in my schizophrenic girlfriend's head. I hate it and I want it to die. Because when she's off her pills, anything could happen. She could even kill someone... that's why I compared it to Russian roulette
*POW*
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- Pimp up my rhymes by leander.
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I'm sorry your girlfriend goes through this, it must be very confusing for her and for you to deal with. Yes, it is rather like Russian Roulette and as we know, that's a dangerous game to play. I wish you too luck with coping.
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It must be very hard to deal with these voices inside your head. In first place for the person who has them, but also for the ones that have to deal with it (partner, family...)
I think you've done a great job with the metaphor actually
the rhyming is done pretty good too, though the flow seems to be a wee bit wobbly here and there...
anyway, thank you for entering this contest, I wish you the best of luck!
Leander -
Thank you for entering...............
................however.....there are so many things wrong with this piece ~
You did not pay attention to the Rules....I'm sorry ~
This was actually a great write.....but following Rules is number 1 ~
Soory,
Bear ~
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How exactly does one's life get to 'Steak', and where is this magical place? I assume the export meat...
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OOPS.... I spelled it wrong. Sorry, I just looked that up... it's "stake" not "steak".... silly me
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Lol... no problem. It just made me giggle a bit this afternoon, which was nice.
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