Lavender florets suckled by bees
Candied Cyclamen shivering under trees
Nestling in nooks, Robert's Foot and Tansy
Whispering "I Love You" to Peony and Pansy
Roses uncurl their sheened velvet robes
Fragrancing the air and filling my nose.
Magic begins as the Columbine weaves
Twisting and tightening around branches and leaves.
Bluebells, Delphinium shout loudly in blue
Whilst Yellow Gorse and Broom speak in a different hue.
Come lay with me amidst my flowery friends
In a secret garden where broken hearts mend.
A contest entry
- Secrets of the Garden - This one is for everyone! by Amunet Wolfbane.
525 points, ended November 11, 2007, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Color Inspired (Cool Colors) by ixtli.
450 points, ended February 22, 2008, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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The last two lines of this are my favorite, but it all flows together beautifully. Nice job!
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An extremely good poem. I can see all the colors and flowers as I read.
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thankyou rbruce, your comment made me read my poem again-and now I'm longing for summer and colour back in my cold,brown wintry garden.
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Very nice image! I am standing there in the dew looking at it all Great work!
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oops forgot your applause. New to this. My first comment in fact
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Just love this one. Stunning! Hear it as I read...volume, speed and sounds...and can read it over and over (and over), more interesting every time. That's rythm!! See it, feel it, hear it, taste it!!!...and love it. Was trying to find a favourite line but not able to. If any I'm most attached to the first 4 and last 2 most but the whole piece fits togetherso perfectly. To me it's immaculate. Thank you for sharing
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Thank you for your wonderful comments.
I'm very humbled by your kind words. Good luck LucyB,Love and happiness to you from Popyday -
Your comments lifted me above the clouds tonight, thank you lucyb
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I think we all have our own secret garden to mend a broken heart, to heal. A place we seek to defy reality and allow our spirits to reign. You've done a great job capturing that here.
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