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Lies

Solitary tear descends,
loss stricken with lies,
to vicious to defend.

Unworthy of forgiveness,
you neglect to comprehend.

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Prompt Give me 18 fabulous words. no more. no less.

A contest entry

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  • leander Moderators member
    December 4, 2007

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    Another poem that asks the brains to work a tiny bit overtime here I think I found an oopsie:
    'too vicious'

    thanks for the entry!
    Leander

  • PersuingHappyness
    November 10, 2007

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    WOW..... this is awesome.... why is it your so good with poetry... and it takes me forever to write one poem and you just spit them out and they are awesome......... This is wonderful... I really do love it... and if I had the points and applauses let you would get them.... awesome.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    November 10, 2007

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    Wow! They are definitely 18 fabulous words! You have captured what some might take paragraphs to say!

    This is stunning, I loved it... it feels sad and yet strong at the same time!


  • CherryOnTop
    November 10, 2007
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    OOHH!! I love this"unworthy of forgiveness,
    you neeglect to comprehend" So Powerful!!