it's a crazy ole world
seems like one great big curse
peoples gotta start changing
cause things cant get much worse
Its a curel cruel cruel world
we gotta live in every day
you cant trust your neighbor
cause he might blow you away
with the gangs on the streets
and death from up in the sky
no wonder even politicians have chose to get high
everybodys talkin' but few of them know
the plans for the evil were created below
we cant learn this in schools
cause to some this offends
but we will see who laughs last
when this life comes to an end
Its a crazy ole world
seems like one great big curse
people's got to start changing
cause the end will get much worse
Author notes
Written October 19th, 2003
A contest entry
- October New Members- "Chin Up" Poetry Contest - Hosted by The AllPoetry Greeter Staff by CookieZeal.
300 points, ended November 3, 2003, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I can see this write set to music..heard it in my mind as i read...Geez Demon..i can't tell you how impressed I am with the talent you possess..amazing!
peace
~Pamela -
I like your poem, it has a very real, honest voice.
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"everybodys talkin' but few of them know
the plans for the evil were created below"<--- my favorite part.
This has some very good lines in it. I'd hoped that you would have resolved it to the suggestion or solution toward the end rather than descend it. See criteria again! Also, the words are to be used within the poem.
Thank you so much for entering and I welcome you to AllPoetry. -
Excellent poem...but you need to add a little inspiration to be in the running to win...maybe a once in a lifetime happening that reinstates a little belief in human kindness and copmpassion?
?? Don't mind me, just a suggesting that would land the poem in the rules and in the running to win!!!Welcom e to AP and Good luck!!! -
it's a good poem but unfortunatel
y does not fit the contest criteria set by CookieZeal - the words listed have to be incorporated to be considered as an entry.
Your poem however speaks volumes of truth - sad to say in some areas it has become the norm rather than the abnormal. Please give the contest another go.
~Von~ -
I think this speaks for itself, This is a crazy old world, but we have no real choice but to live in it, and not much we can change about how we are living, and you cant really trust anyone in this world today, I think you did great. Please check out my work sometime, I think you will like read between lies. let me know.
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well as a poem and if one takes it at it conceptual meaning it is very well written and has a lot of vivid images, yet it does not follow the guidelines set forth in the contest.
Please revise and repost, I am very much wanting to read more of your work
peace be with & blessed be;
shaggy wolf
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