The wind whispers in my ear
Soft secrets that to me, are unclear
Whisper whisper My love Whisper whisper
The wind now screaming like a roaring twister
Just make it stop!!
It screams
Just make it stop
A voice unseen
The wind whispers in my ear
Soft secrets that to me, are unclear
The striped marks on your arm?
The striped marks are from self harm?
Why cant it stop?!
it screams!
Why can't it stop?!
a voice unseen.
The night is hushed.
No wind to be heard
The night is hushed
No more whisper of that secrets word.
Whisper
whispe
whisp
whis
whi
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Please tell me what you think
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Excellent
Def. can relate to the soulfulness of needs not met and thoughts one might have about oneself and the need to let the pain out but not let anyone else know about your secrets and pain. Love it! Make sure you spell check before submitting and you are def. talanted. (ok I am not a good speller either) M -
Now I know I put clappys why aren't they showing up for my Ducky?
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Umm.. wow.. yeah it was that awesome! Only thing I could see that needed to be corrected is in line 20 secrets should be secret. And there is something strange about line 11 like it was forced rhyme. It's an amazing write my friend. I have been there. Except I was on the other end of that cycle. But alas it is a struggle I must deal with everyday. I'm just thankful that I have the strength to overcome it. Wonderful my friend!
~ Crys -
Amazing poem, I love what you've written here. IDK how many or how pronounce your scars are, but I have too many to even begin to count on my left arm, and some of them were very deep cuts, therefore the scars are very pronounced. They show up even more when it's cold. Even the scars from when I was 15, 16yrs old are still there. At least they aren't purple anymore, they are white, but turn purplish in the cold. I also have several scars on my left leg and thigh.
Anyway, I hope you are OK, and taking good care of yourself.
~Monica
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