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Goodbye (18+)

Candles burning, giving off just enough light for our two silhouettes.
Passion between us is incredible, sweat drips off our bodies, on to the sheets.
I reach down and massage what makes you a man, while your fingers play with me. We are a duet.
You take yourself and tease me just a little bit. Barely in and then back out. We give off steamed heat.
You plunge deep inside of me, make me moan and scream.
You bite and suck on my neck, I pull your hair.
My nipples long for your tongue to caress, these feelings between us are like a dream.
Our two beings like one, entwined, on top of each other with our bodies bare.
Hours go by, or at least that's how it seems. Your moans getting louder
as I ride you like a beast. Your hands grabs my breasts as you hold on for dear life.
Your powerful green eyes pierce my heart, you touch my skin white as powder.
Your final plunge makes me cum, and you moan your loudest moan. You pierce me like a knife.
    The candles are now burning low, our shadows slowly demise,
    for in the morning you must leave, we have said our long goodbye.

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Option #5

AP Family - i think i'd like to be your cousin

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  • j-ay rose
    January 21, 2008
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    this isnt particularly what i had in mind while make this contest. however, thank you for entering.


  • trista gold member
    December 8, 2007

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    Thank you for taking the time to enter my contest, but unfortunately I can't consider this for a trophy since it doesn't fit under the rules, having already won a couple of trophies. (Congrats on those, btw )It'a also very questionable if this is "hard-core erotica" or not...but I feel it comes very close, if not. In any case, thanks again and good luck to you in all your writing endeavors.

    Best wishes,
    ~J.


  • leander Moderators member
    December 3, 2007

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    Again, you have managed to write a very sensual, and tasteful erotic poem here.
    I like the picture in time you painted, that beautiful night (evening), lit with flickering candlelight and the dance of both your souls

    Thank you for this entry as well
    Leander


  • Desire gold member
    November 30, 2007

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    Thank You!

    Thank You for Your entry: Goodbye (18+)

    Wonderful piece You have brought forth and took the reader on a sensual journey through Your words~~
    Give us front row seats to witness exchange
    of passion

    Loved these lines:
    I reach down and massage what makes you a man,
    while your fingers play with me. We are a duet.
    You take yourself and tease me just a little bit. Barely in and then back out.
    We give off steamed heat.

    Congratulations on Your HM in another contest

    Magnificent verse You have penned~
    Thank You for sharing Your Talent!
    Judging will be done shortly
    Many blessings to You in our Group contest
    Best wishes too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • danceswsquirrels
    November 28, 2007

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    ::laughs::: Sorry.. I'm not making fun of your writing at all I promise! But.. you want to be my AP cousin.. and you submited an erotics write.. it makes me giggle... welcome to the family!

  • Sam-a-nantha
    November 17, 2007

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    This made me blush. However, I'm having a hard time seeing the "honey" aspect behind it all. Very descriptive, and very well written.


  • Tony El Great silver member
    November 15, 2007

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    Your poem was more about the love making between two lovers and was not centered at all upon the clitoris as its main focal point; however, thank you for entering my contest.


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    November 13, 2007

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    Wonderful and erotic my friend!
    Beautifully written with some great imagery
    throughout. Well done and all the best to
    you with this one in the contest! Thanks
    a lot for sharing it here and keep up the
    great work!




    Jeremy0826


  • ExpectingMommy18
    November 12, 2007
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    i have read and commented on this before but nonetheless it still amazes me
    you did a great job with this peice here,as i have sadi before.it is very hot and keeps you wondering,great job

    thanks for the entry and good luck in the contest!


  • Upon Deaths Meeting
    November 11, 2007
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    It seems to me that this would do even better as a short story in the Erotica genre. I think that this was full of description and meaning, flow and wording, as well.

    Keep up the great work, Leslie. I look forward to your other writes in the future. They're all just amazing, and I can't wait until you have more.


  • lesbian-in-love
    November 10, 2007

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    Nicely done. The usage of words was very good. I liked it. Thanks fore entering and good luck to you.


  • Celticjedi
    November 10, 2007

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    Exactly what I was looking for, the feelings I mean. This is a work of art. Beautifully written and stirs forbidden feelings deep down in all of us. Wonderful job, keep up the great writing.
    From Cj

  • ExpectingMommy18
    November 9, 2007

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    wow this is hot,this is very good.
    you can write good erotic you should write more
    one of the best i have read so far,even mine,lol
    i like the wording and how it happend,very HOT!
    great job,you should win your contests with no probems


  • penman gold member
    November 9, 2007
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    Powerful

    Very intense poem. Such marvelous creatiion. Best of luck in the contest.


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    November 9, 2007

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    "O Oh my///made me feel like i was a intruder..sheesh powerfu piece...lmao pun intended wha a way to say goodbye.

    Thanks for sharing
    Tory

  • Page Deleted.
    November 9, 2007
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    thats hot. thanks for entering.

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