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Touched By An Angel

I've been touched by an angel, touched by his love.
He sent me a crow, he sent me a dove.
The crow for its legend, the dove for its peace
Both were beautiful birds to say the least.

I've been touched by an angel, touched by his humility.
Such kindness, strength, and courage influence me.
He has a good soul with a golden heart
I knew once I saw him, I was in love at the start.

I've been touched by an angel who is very good & kind.
I love him with all my heart, soul, and mind.
He is so very strong, honest, brave, and true
My heart soars beyond the skies when he says "I love you".

I've been touched by an angel with invisible wings.
His beautiful talent is shown when he dances and sings.
His love for music is equally to mine
I know he is my soulmate, my love, and only mine.

I've been touched by an angel who is a mortal, like me.
My heart is broken because he's so far away from me.
There's a far distance, but we're connected together
Because our hearts and our souls are one forever.

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  • Puppydog gold member
    October 18, 2009

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    VERY TOUCHING!!!!!

    In our lives people come and make a difference, it is those who give their very heart and soul and lift us up when we fall that shine in our hearts and keep it warm and bright.'s


  • Lyrical Noob
    July 13, 2009

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    Wow this was amazing when I read the word crow it made me really want to watch the movie "the crow" again anyway back to the poem I loved it thank you for entering my contest and good luck
    -♥Amy♥


    • songstress80
      July 15, 2009
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      funny you should mention the movie "the crow" because it's my favorite movie and brandon lee is my favorite actor...i respect him still even though he died and i used to have a huge crush on him so this poem was in a way reflected on the film and him....i also honored brandon lee by naming my son after him...and yes, my son brandon actually has lee as his middle name instead of last name (haha)


  • Blissful Melody
    November 13, 2008

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    Sounds like you've found the one... Congrats if you have.

    This is a beautiful poem, it has strong emotion, and doesn't lack in depth. But I will point out it's a bit wordy. A few things could be shortened here and there to aid the poetic feel. But overall, I love it. It's got real, hands-on, feelings poured into it. Well done!


    • songstress80
      November 13, 2008
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      thanks for the comment. well this poem is definately rusty, i wrote it when i was in high school. glad you enjoyed it! also thanks for adding me! i hope that we will both get to read more of each others works and give comments to help our artwork look good...lol! ;0)


  • The Squeeze
    January 2, 2008

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    I would first like to say what an excellent poem you have shared with this community.

    However ,I would like to make note on some words that I thought you could have made better choices on.

    For example in stanza two, you use "humility" breaking not only your meter, but rhyming it with "me" giving a 4-1 ratio, which is an awkward when pronouncing.

    And perhaps, in stanza three, you will notice a similar pattern, but as well the cliche line "I love you" There are many ways to express love, but, if he is that special one, do you not think you would have a better line to say to him? I've been touched by an angel with invisible wings.
    His beautiful talent is shown when he dances & sings.

    Similarly, a meter disparity is located in your last stanza's first two lines.


    Yet I agree, that love is like an angel, it reminds me of "Its A Wonderful Life"

    You have written some majestic, defined the beauty of love, and for that I extend my gratitude.

    Bravo.

    A.S.


    • songstress80
      January 30, 2008
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      thank you for your gratitude and your kind words...you give excellent criticism...i hope that you would feel free to comment on other poems of mine, i would love to know your opinion...i'm glad that my poem was able to give you some inspiration and definition...i hope to see you again!


  • Poet-of-the-shadows
    November 10, 2007
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    I never did know who this one was for


    • songstress80
      January 30, 2008
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      just dreaming

      actually, just like you have your dreamscapes poems this is one that is a dream...i don't remember what the guy really looked like, i just remember how i wrote about him in this poem...kinda funny isn't it? well, you understand how dreams are, we are alike you and i my friend...we've known each other for a long time... although i did write this poem a long time ago and it could've been about you, but i'm not really sure...for all i remember it could be about some guy i had a crush on in high school that i had a great dream about...if i remember i'll get back to you on that but in the mean time just as the song says "gotta keep on dreamin'"...you should really look that song up by the way...it's an oldy but a goody. ;0)

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