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A Typical Fucking Night In Oak Park

We sat up to Larry’s one Saturday night
Rum in hand there was sure to be a fight
Martin was being his usual self
Cause he stole camrons rum and helped himself
We had fun on Larry’s CB
While Stan was out having a pee
Sheri was outside for her usual break
And martin followed hopeing to be a victim of rape
Martin was trying hard to get a hug
So Sheri pulled out the shotgun and loaded the slug
Cameron was teaching her how to fight
But martin didn’t want to wrestle Sheri that night
I was just trying to play a song
While was trying to see sheris thong
By this time, Sheri was getting mad
Larry shrilly and Stanley laughed and were glad
Everyone wanted to hear wino
But i told them not till ten or so
Martin was getting on my last nerve
And Sheri wasn’t to pleased with the stupid perve
He was trying to call me queer
Then he told bend over then hauled out his gear
The clock struck eleven and we had to go home
Sheri let me off at martins and i started to Rome
We thought about what we could do to his house
Cause no one was home to stop not even Ashley his spouse
We move all his stuff in front of his door
He was so drunk he fell on the floor
He blamed the fun on Johnny hill
But im sure the truth soon will spill
Martin better have learned not to call Jeremy queer
Or Next time the doghouse will be up his rear



© jeremy williams, All rights reserved


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this is one of my better works

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  • Night Terrors
    May 10

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    I really loved this poem I think it was a fasinating poem you did a great job on this I can see why it is one of you better ones

    The Positives:

    Great imagery this was really a great poem lots of wonderful imagery and sounded so great out loud

    Room For Improvement:
    Nothing I can see you did wonderful



    My Favorite Part:
    Then he told bend over then hauled out his gear
    The clock struck eleven and we had to go home
    Sheri let me off at martins and i started to Rome
    We thought about what we could do to his house
    Cause no one was home to stop not even Ashley his spouse
    We move all his stuff in front of his door

    Perfect I love this part
    Overall:

    I give this an 8/10 you did great. I hope to see you in my future contests thanks so much for entering.

    ~*~Apathetic Poison~*~


  • Mrs D
    February 6
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    didnt make me laugh...

    thanks for entering


  • aboomer silver member
    December 27, 2008

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    Nicely done with the images in this - your descriptions are easy to 'see'.
    I like the story you've told here - a typical night at the park.

    thank you for your entry
    best wishes in the contest


  • JeremyWilliams
    November 9, 2007
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    yay me