put my hair in a pony tail
hard hat on its cold as hell
blue prints grabed by manacured hands
inside steel toe shoes my feet are slammed
when the day is done for me
dust and sheet rock cover me
run to shower and wash my hair
find some sexy underwear
cover my body in lotion thick
do my hair and put on lipstick
get out my high heals and nylons too
and my black dress to dine with you
A contest entry
- Prompt Contest 10 enteries/40 words or less by mysticstorm.
475 points, ended November 10, 2007, 8 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Wow! This was truly amazing. Congratulations with winning the bronze. It was certainly deserved. This is such a sweet poem. God bless you in all that you do and write, and keep up the excellent work my friend.
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Hey I like this I used to be a land surveyor and dressed all man like but came home at night and dressed like a lady. This is very nice, Excellent Poem. Congrats on the bronze.
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I realy like this .
You have done an amazing piece about the hard working world of the woman carpenter. I know just what you were getting at as I have done my share of sheetrock hanging. This is such a dirty tireing job but rewarding in viewing the end result. I know she felt about the bath and change of clothes at the end of the day as well. Excelent piece you have written here glad to see you were rewarded for your wonderful piece.
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Nice write.I liked the way you took the sequence of events from work to a relax dine.Great ! congrats for the medal too!
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its really good. dont know wat else to say, its just really good. i like the rhymeing.
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Excellent
Very well done. And congratulations on the bronze. It was well deserved
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the woman who knows how to fulfill both sex appeal positions and get away with it! hurray for you
full guts and sex appeal
congrats on the medal winning
Tamara
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Hip Hip Hurray for the working woman
Who dares to not be still sexy. You knowI love this one sis. I ware a hard hat every day
So yes between the hat hair and dirt that sticks
we still got to make room, for the sexy.
Great job sis. Congrates on the bronze.
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Good. i will make dinner. set the table. have the wine chilled just right. smile. nice words.
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oh raggy... let me see your pony tail love..then come dine with me ,you know we want too
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this is great...
love the transformation
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I really love this sissy excellent imagery and I enjoyed this very much. Miss you being on lately, but so happy to find this. ~blessings to you always~
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This idea is really cute. There are some spelling errors but the concept is great. I wish you luck, your a sweetie!
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Please look over rules and see if you can work it into them.
It is a great write, I do not wish to DQ it.
Thank you!
mystic -
The title caught my eye before I even realized that it was written by an author who has actually read some of my stuff. I was disappointd, though. The typos ruin this: "poney tail", "mamicured", "steal toed", "slamed", and "underware." The rhyme scheme really adds nothing to the poem. Indeed, you even rhyme the same word (me). I know this was an entry for a quickie contest, but at least put an iota of effort into it. I know you have commented on more of my works than anyone else probably, and I'm sorry to have to come across harsh, but you can do so much better. I know it.
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